One Punch Man | King God Killer (Dropped)

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4Eyes

If you want to read this fanfiction, it's better to skip straight to chapter 22, This is my first writing about fanfiction and also I will not revise chapters 1-21

LV 1

zak_moe_5413

The story has a nice idea, but oh man, the spelling and grammar are bad, and every chapter is short. The interactions feel weird, and the story is all over the place. You have no idea what's going on; you get information here and there, but it's not clear. There's no world background, and the MC is brain dead for making a deal with someone who will eat his soul once he dies. I don't mind that if he can become powerful, but he just sold his soul for power. And he reincarnated himself in the One Punch Man world, where he could die at any time. Please use Grammarly or ChatGPT to fix the grammar issue. It won't take that long; it's only 12 chapters.

LV 2

4Eyes

lower your expectations for this fanfic, this is my first time making it and there will be lots of mistakes in grammar and dialogue. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=fp][img=faceslap][img=fp][img=faceslap][img=fp][img=faceslap]

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I got a stroke traying to read this garbage

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4Eyes

Thanks for all review i will keep improve for this fan-fanfic [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp] [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]

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HUNTER_X_23

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4Eyes

If you are reading this I suggest you turn off your brain[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]