A Favor to Old Friends (ASOIAF/GOT)

LV 4

Mulato_69

The plot is amazing!The story e tirely dependent on the concept of Magic bringing balance to the world of ASOIAFHope you continue working on this one

LV 5

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The concept is alright but the writing quality, story dev and character design leave a bit to be desired... The MC Is Lunarya Stark. Latin name, which feels out of setting. MC has duo toned hair, and is the younger twin to Lyanna Stark. MC has the mindset of a teenage girl with all the drama that entails as a when shes not yet in her teens unless the author changed the ages. The story itself is told with new facts being habhazardly inserted. One moment mc is doing one thing, the next apparently she was doing another thing and the initial thing turns out to be a by product. The who, what, when and where are not very clear in this story. The formating could also do with a touch up. spme paragraphs are unpleasantly long when reading this on a smartphone. Pov's are camouflaged as random scene breaks. Example: XXXXXXXRIKARDXXXXXXX Thats illegible as all hell. I didnt even notice that was a POV indicator at first. All in all tough, its minor things that can be easily edited should the author wish to enhance the reading experience. It would be fairly simple to provide a good reading experience if the author simply mimicked the formatting of the most popular WN to the authors liking on here. Genre wise? I would peg this as a solid Gen Z mindset Teengirl Drama.