A Loner's System

Very well, looks like I'm gonna be doing this again. First on the itinerary, the issues of capitalization and incorrect usage of commas, apostrophes and other such things. It's just sporadic, one moment you're reading a semi decent sentence, the next it feels like it was done with little to no regard to how it looks. There is a genuine feeling of physical pain from my body as I read the first few chapters. The transitions from one aspect to the next is sorta sloppy. It could be better, but I'm pretty sure that it could also be worse, so I guess there's that. The character is simplistic for the first few bits, and that part is understandable because this review was made when there were only still six chapters, so consume with a grain of salt is all that I can advise the person reading this review. The updates aren't completely specified yet, since it's not even a week old, but it could be decent. And finally, the world. Good old Terra being such a wondrous playground for so many creators to tear asunder for their own narratives. It's not exactly new, but it's no that stale either. Overall, it's a three out of five from me chief. Grammar, punctuation, and capitalization are most likely the things that you'll have to polish up first. This baby has the potential, but it just needs the nice polish and varnish is all.