A New Hero in DC?

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DarthVegito

15year old Kryptonian from a different DC universe comes to earth and eventually he goes for an interview with Lois Lane and then ends up R*ping her so yeah it’s pretty bad

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nan0xzer0x

I don't think I would be doing well if I don't get a perfect score, so I will blatantly do it, it's bad I know, but YOLO//(=))()(=)()/)=/=)/()=/)=()==

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AstralJuggernaught

Title should be "a new douchebag in dc" Title should be "a new douchebag in dc" Title should be "a new douchebag in dc" Title should be "a new douchebag in dc" Title should be "a new douchebag in dc" Title should be "a new douchebag in dc"

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LifelessMan

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Miguel_Silveira

Parabéns continue o bom trabalho. Você tem uma boa noção de como pessoa amadurecidas lidam com o sexo. Espero que você continue com essa atitude para os relacionamentos futuros, é muito chato quando alguém se apaixona por um abraço ou elogios então continue assim. Vou tentar te ajudar com as doações

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Rico321

when the extra comes out --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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artemdeus

You author story's getting good 20+ days ago please don't drop this is honestly the best fan fic on dc I've read so far so please give a reply dude 😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢

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Daoist003250

Realmente Tô gostando dessa história, ela é muito boa. Espero que continue escrevendo .........................................................................

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Horny_Dawg

Waiting for more :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)):-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-)) :-))

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Hazielr

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artemdeus

Dude this fan fic was really good keep it drama and slice of life with a little bad guys pop up from time to time also when are you updating you could keep wonder women dating superman for the excuse atleast until they break up so you go after Lois in harem then supergirl.

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Daoist721221

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_2MUCH4ME_

Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good, Good,

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artemdeus

It was pretty good until author stopped updating I think it's dropped it was a ride though pretty cool and fan fic and keeps you hooked for more.

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starking

thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu

LV 4

Firebowle

Well the novels First impression was quite good, but writing such an unrealistic scene in chapter two was definetly too much. It is quite a disappointment as a gruesome warfanfiction. But if this is your cup of tea, I think you would appreciate it.

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Ayoub_Z

Hi man i hopefully you don't drop this novel and keep up the good work......................................... I fan........................

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artemdeus

You know you could just create a women rather than go after what's already been done before I mean I've read a lot of fanfics none have original ideas other than the mc and a few plot twist can't you like create a women for the mc coz the whole harem thing is getting stail and overated a pink lantern wouldn't be so bad to start with also did you drop this novel updates getting left behind.😅

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reb1

could use a lot more in the writing quality section also needs to work on the grammar the way you write the characters because they don't feel as real to themselves plus also i felt like you should made him a little less op after he fought that much was covered blood and went to another universe as his ended the mental a physical strain he went through plus also i think he should have been wearing a half torn jumpsuit plus also i feel like he should have shy black and light to dark brown eyes before then darkish red eyes after and you don't have to emphasize how handsome he is plus also and i know when i'm talking about grammar and using in the right places i'm using plus also a lot and that does feel contradictory but read this and don't make him so handsome all the girls go wild not every kryptonian has a handsome face so don't force the angle that they do okay just to what kinda characters he is after the dimension transfer and work on your grammar when writing the fan-fic also why don't you make him be decently lean and have have a small shaggy cute face and you'll be good okay