Azaki : the devil warrior

Wowww this has got to be one of the best stories I have ever read, the plot, the characters the world design men everything thing is just perfect although I did notice some grammar error in some chapters but it's okay well done👍👍👍👍👍🥰🥰🥰🥰🥰

LV 11

Jhaydun

It seems like the author has great ideas in place for a story. The themes, ideas, characters, and world seem to be well-thought, but I have to mention that the potential for this story is hidden behind paragraphs that are too long and painfully glaring grammar, capitalisation, and punctuation mistakes. It was also interesting to see the dialogue written as it would be for a screenplay. As the author grows their craft, learns more, and edits their work, I'm sure this novel will become something that many will enjoy reading. Simply finding someone willing to help them edit their novel would improve it significantly. I'd also like to mention to the author that they can use a feature to write an author's comments/thoughts for the end of a chapter, rather than writing their thoughts inside the chapter itself. I'd be more than happy at that point to increase my review, but it will need to stay around 3 stars for now.

LV 2

WritersBlocku

Overall it is pretty good, the writing style is very unique and different. Replacing quotation marks with the names makes it look like a script, But it does relieve the confusion of figuring out who is talking by placing their names right there. It's good, keep it up, author.

The first thing that stood out to me was the writing style. its definitely very different from what i and most people are used to, but for the most part its ok. though its more or less likea summary to a movie than a novel. but because of this style, it feels very stiff and clunky. not much flow to be seen. you can definitely improve in that aspect. some typos here and there, nothing special. Its only been 4 chapters so the characters arent really all that well developed. It looked kinda cliché by the end, i just hope you either have a solid picture of what you want to write, or you have some good ideas. anyways its ok but there are a lot of aspects to improve

LV 1

Pattyglow

Wonderful story, interesting plot and great world building but you could improve on your grammar aspects I noticed places where you would write "what do mean" and things like this make it hard to read but still it's a nice book

LV 10

Sirius459

After i read all the chapter i came with the conclusion about this story. First of all the dialog need some improvement it's not like reading a novel but feels like a movie script the world building you create was really nice and i enjoyed reading it so overall yeah this is a good story but need some improvement on the dialog.

LV 12

cutest_miss

it a very interesting story with a nice writing design which is different from other writers and also stand you out as a potential writer, I'm looking forward to read more chapters of the book,

LV 1

GMSJakers

It's an interesting design of the book, but the grammar really throws me off. The first chapter is a blob of words and is very hard to read, so I'd fix that and then get a proofreader or edit the grammar in the story.

LV 4

Demons_and_I

I'll give you a thumbs up for the effort but I'm gonna keep it real. Grammar is terrible, the story idea is unique and worth building on, the first chapter isn't paragraphed well, but has a lot of information on the book. All in all, concept wise, you are off to a good start, but your writing needs tons of work...

LV 2

BeckyAnimeGirl54

When I read the description, I was hooked. The siblings are so cool. I can't wait to read more. This is a neat story. Keep up the good work.