Caged In Finery

Hi! I'm beginning to write a new book based around a few dreams I've had. I know that sounds weird, but here me out! Don't you dare click away. Please ;-;
The story will be about twins born in a country I made up, there will be a set of races that I will cover and give full descriptions to. Basically, if you have any suggestions on what I should add or change then message me or leave a comment! Thank you for your time!
Read Chapter 1 to gain an understanding of my book!