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Ectoplasma, The power that this world is relying on.
In the middle of this world there's a boy named Aalish, a boy with a harsh task thrown on him to protect the district that he was born in and to win the war that is about to start in 3 years.
The flame of the fire inside him isn't going to heat everyone up in this endless world, that spreads before his eyes. Who will be lucky enough to see this light shine the brightest?
To win the war and protect the district, his search for a teacher/master to teach him how to fight begins!
(I will be posting 1-3 chapters a week if nothing goes wrong, I am a student so sometimes I'll have to take a break from my series for a week (Because of my exams), however I will try to make it up with more chapters for the next week.)
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Firstly, not a bad story. I can assure you that most readers will be invested in the story once the author continues to place effort into it. Synopsis: Not bad. Provided the necessary information about what the story is about. That's all that's truly needed. Writing Quality: Honestly, this is where the book falls for me. There are many run-on sentences, a few missing punctuation marks, and even some words that should have been capitalized were left in common. I urge the author to fix these issues as many readers might find an issue with this. Grammar is essential when attracting readers. Story development: Neatly done. The main character seems humans despite being ranked #4. Not too egotistical and not too timid. Character Design: Not much said but It's a matter of preference whether you want to describe your characters in detail or not. Some readers like to imagine how the characters look for themselves so it goes either way. Overall: Not a bad book in any way. The story can be captivating and the author has talent. You just need a little more writing experience and to fix your grammatical errors then you're good to go. The book is far from unreadable, just needs some edits. Keep up the good work author!
Let's start with the story development first. I like that the story is fast paced, just good for an adventure kind of stories. I commend the author for the World building too. The efforts of making a new language is something I rarely see in stories. It's really cool! The characters are decently made. Regarding the writing quality, there are minor typos but nothing major. If there's something I want to point out, I think it's the over use of onomatopoeia (I really hope I used the right term and spelled that right lol). Personally, it distracts me in reading. I won't be saying to remove everything as it's part of the story and your writing style should always prevail. Just maybe lessen it a bit, or not too redundant. I hope you didn't mind my personal view about it😄 Overall, I still rate this a 5 for the good story and efforts of the author!
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First of all, the story development is good. Personally, I'm not a fan of slow paced novels but yours is quite fast. The characters are most interesting and I love how you synopsis clearly tells what the story entails. There errors are a few (not that many) and I also love the setting. However, not to rush but the novel could do with more chapters. I like it, keep updating!
First, the concept of the story is very interesting, world building is unique, even the author makes a unique language in his own world. Good idea. It's just that the first few chapters are a bit confusing, it gets better in later chapters, but there's still a bit of a headache. Like a paragraph that is too long. This is a good and unique story, keep up the good work!
Wow, okay the lore runs deeper than any book I've seen on here so far. The world-building is great and the story is going in a very exciting direction. This is really a world to get immersed in and enjoy. There are a few things holding it back like minor grammatical errors - it doesn't effect how the story is read so much but there are moments where it does break the immersion a little. But in all honesty, that isn't enough to pull you away from what is a great narrative.
Loved the chapters so far. The synopsis is well defined, interesting and clearly describes what the story will be on. Chapter one was intriguing with well-paced. The way the author describes the events is unique and hooked me to read further chapters in one go. Good luck author for your work!!
I'm still reading it. The story had such potential. The writing style is really good, detailed wording. It's not the best but could turn out to be great in the future! I love it!💕
Hey! This is a nice story. However, there are some grammatical errors that if corrected, will definitely improve the story. all the rest is pretty good, especially the world background.
A fascinating novel with its own language. That alone is compelling. The world background is unique and also compelling. Not to mention the story itself which pulls the readers into an amazingly well crafted and well told world. A must read. Well done author.
This is very unique adventure story with it’s own Ideas and leaves you wanting to read so you know what happened. The writing is okay And the character building needs work. ✌🏻Great story- Just keep updating as much as possible
Lots of action here. Cool. It's fun to read a book like I'm watching anime. Writing is good but needs editing. Update isn't daily. Pace is fast which is good. I see lots of action and cool moves. The characters are pretty interesting with the setting set in a demon world in the mountains. I love the fun creativity of this world. And they speak real demon language. Nice touch!
I liked the story quite a lot. It is really mysterious and interesting. The world background seemed amazing even from the first chapter and the characters were also well described. I am not a professional or something to point out people's flaws, but I guess it would be better if some paragraphs were shortened. That's all. Besides that, everything about the story is amazing. Good work, author~
The mother giving birth to her son even tho she was a virgin reminded me of the Virgin Mary. I really liked that part a lot. I also could really feel the anxiety of Reia in the first chapter. It's like how do you tell your father that you gave birth although you had no sexual activity. That's really hectic 😩 Overall, I'm really intrigued with the way you started the story so I'm definitely saving this book in my reading list .Great job [img=recommend]
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I really appreciate the writer's effort in forming a new language and the research done. The plot is unique and interesting too. The environment or the conversations are described beautifully. The writing can be improved a little. Though the first chapter was a little confusing, the rest chapters were fine. The character design can be improved or expressed properly as the names and the relations are quite difficult to understand. Keep Going!! (5/5 for your creativeness) I suggest using 'Grammarly or any other writing assistant app to portray your creative ideas without grammatical mistakes.
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This novel has a very interesting plot and it really shows how creative minded the author is. However, I was too confused to read passed chapter 1. So many things happened in a single chapter but it lacked proper flow and transitions. First, someone was giving birth then all of a sudden the woman that was giving birth was being questioned by her father then we reached a scene I had no idea was going on, then a funeral and then a boy's journey to a mountain to find a teacher. Everything was literally all over the place, it was as if the writer was trying to cramp everything into a single chapter. I'm still trying to figure out if Aalish is the woman that was giving birth or the boy that set out on an adventure or if he was named after her or if he's her son. I'm just extremely confused. Grammar, punctuation and capitalization was another serious issue. Punctuation marks were misused and some sentences started with common letters. A comma should appear before a character says something. Also, I see the writer had Aalishes when he should have Aalish's, the apostrophe s is used to show ownership. Aalishes would be the plural of Aalish. The sentences are also structured poorly. Some paragraphs are just too long, it's a major turn off and not at all attractive. Overall, this novel has potential solely because the plot was creatively established. The author clearly writes straight from his imagination which is a good thing but it can be a bad thing if the author doesn't pay much attention to wording. This was my honest review, I hope you can get better and better as you write. [img=recommend]
The synopsis posts an amazing overview of the story, and it started with a good narrative. The world building was suffice and well-written, as well as the character. The main character's energy and vibe is also fun to read with. There are several grammatical errors but their not intrusive to the totality of the work. Overall, this is a good book to read! ❤️
Here are my honest thoughts based on what I read so far about this novel: World Building: So far the word building in this novel is quite okay. I see some effort that the author make and unique location such as a place where the mystical beast appeared also the ectoplasma concept that is interesting, but apology I have some complain with it. First of all, I think it's better to reduce the infodumping paragraph to make the story easier to follow because sometime too much info dumping only distract the story. Lastly, I think the author can give further description or make it the place or location more vivid imagery or detailed to make the reader easier to imagine or make them more interested to read the book. Character: As for the character, they are all fine I guess especially with each of their physical trait such as red hair, green hair, and blond hair. However, I am sorry again, I suggest to give more description especially on what kind of cloth their wearing to make their appearance more memorable. I also can see some development with the main character that have a quite tragic past especially with his new journey of life that hopefully the author can expand more and further exploring his feeling after he lost his mother. Overall, it's quite a fine read and thank you very much. Keep up the good work!!
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The starting of the novel was written very nicely, it gave me that dark-themed fantasy novel vibe. And I was able to visualise every scene in my mind as it's a movie. And the expressing of emotions was top notch which even showed the different personalities of the characters. There weren't many typos or grammatical errors and the story was easy to understand and cope up with. The updating stability seems stable and world-building is good but it would be better if you work in it a bit more. Last but not the least Good work Author! This book is now a part of my collection!
Hi dear readers! Author here! I wanted to write something about the story and its future as well as something more general. This is my first story ever, so it may be a bit amateurish at some points. I do try to make my writing better by reading the reviews that I got so far and fix what they tell me is confusing, wrong or not described enough. Sometimes my updates are a bit random so I apologize for that. Now for the future of the series. I don't know how much will I write, but I don't plan to drag this story on since the ending is already chosen. I am planning for a sequel, but I will see how this story first works out. And lastly I hope you enjoy it. Thank you for your time and have fun reading!