Identity Thief

LV 15

XOMatsumaeohana

Review Swap Valid for Chapter 4 Writing Quality: 🤔 This story is written in first person narrative, something people tend to avoid here on WN. While there are quite a few mistakes grammar and punction wise. The writing is readable and flows, doesn't confuse the readers in anyway. Just some suggestions • Don't capitalize when somebody is yelling (looks unprofessional) most people tend to use actions to clarify when a person is shouting, rather than using capital letters. For example, using words like 'yelled' or 'shouted' would do. • Description is important: Character movements, raising - lifting their hand. Character thoughts and feelings. In chapter 2- the FL getting beat up, is that supposed to be a flashback? Not very clear, hope the author can add some description for this. • Longer chapters. The suggested chapter count for webnovels tend to be 800-1.500 words +. Character Development: From what I've read so far. We get a weak female lead. But I suppose this gradually will change as the story progresses? I hope the author gives sufficient explanation for the background story of our FL. Story Development and World Background: Too soon to tell, so I'm putting these two together. For World background right now it's lacking, of course this is only because the novel has just started. But I feel like the author could describe the setting more especially in the opening chapter. Opening chapter just jumps to speaking dialouge with no description. Where is the scene taking place? Introduction of the FL? The other characters? Need description. Hope the author can work on these things. The story development is fast pace, were immediately thrown into the scene of the FL discovering the two identities of her Bf? (Sorry if I misunderstood this) and then the following chapter the FL is in a new town and there was a time skills. Again sorry if I got this wrong, but the lack of description regarding the scene changes make it difficult to understand. I do get a very strong 'mystery' and 'revenge' vibes from this story though. Overall: This story needs some good old editing to fix up the grammar. Some scenes need to be rewritten to clarify what's going on in the scenes. The plot is very interesting, but in had a hard time understanding with the lack of description regarding scene changes.

Though the writing needs some polishing, I truly enjoyed reading it! As a fellow writer of first person narratives, I love that you took up the challenge as well. The mystery and flow of the story pulled me right in. Keep going, I’m curious towards future updates.

LV 14

zetsubouaichan

The title is eye-catching, the synopsis is short, but it piqued my interest. It's still early to tell about this story. But, at this point, the mystery intrigued me. I want to know what happened.

LV 5

EmpressSK

Firstly it has an eye catching name When I read it the mystery in the beginning really interested me. Writing quality is good I like it... Do give it a try 🙂 And yeah good job Author 👍

LV 6

Good_Light_Sleep

There are not much novels from the first person perspective so it might world like a double edge sword interesting yet at the same time some readers on this site might not be use to it. The world around the MC is expanded decently, the pacing is alright but the mystery at the start is interesting. Nice job. :D

LV 13

Tea_Tae

It's honestly too early to tell. There are only four chapters and there isn't enough character development nor story progress. The grammar is amazing but the chapters should be longer (at least 1k words). I hope the author updates soon. I might increase my rating after reading more chaps :)