Nightshade of Unveiled

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ZenMaverick

Well compared to my first novel i think this is my best work when im writing this novel i enjoyed it so much and i hope you guys enjoyed it as much as i did

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Uncle_Moon

You have an interesting plot idea while there is a shadow mention I guess maybe his power is related to shadowsThe writing quality is excellent, I love the description of the action. good works there hope to read more chapter

(PART OF REVIEW SWAP) Warning: Everything I say is subjective and it's just a reader's perspective and all that. I'm just one person, and this might not be my type of novel. First Impressions: Wow, those really are 4 whole chapters before the first chapter. I've never read a book where the glossary was at the start, but it kind of worries me that you might not explain it later on since it's already here. I kind of skipped over 'Nightshade' since I'm not a fan of reading dictionaries. Onto the prologue. I actually think this could act as chapter one since it introduces your major characters. Now, I know that prologue is just another word for introduction, but I noticed that a lot of people just skip the prologue and jump into the first chapter, which is not great, especially when you have multiple prologues. The writing is great. I think the grammar is almost perfect, though there are some things like putting a period before a quotation mark ("like this.") and putting a period before continuing a quote ("Like," said Dan. "I don't know if that's right"). Other than that, you have good descriptors and an overall nice writing style. There are some things like Kael saying "Was it a dream?" like three times in a row and also talking to himself though, so I think the dialogue can be improved just a bit ("I can't just accept that some shadowy figure appeared out of nowhere and started talking to me" is kind of a strange thing to talk to your self about. If it was me, I would've had the whole sequence just be him thinking in his head instead of whispering to, particularly no one). Characters: Now, I only read the prologues and skimmed the next few chapters, but so far, it's pretty good. I like Kael as well as Jake - while he lasted. It looks like a solo adventure so far, which is good, but it might become a problem if he keeps talking to himself. It might just be me and since I don't talk to myself, I don't know if that's how it works, but since this is a novel and not a movie, I think he can just keep his thoughts as thoughts. As for Kael, he's a good old protagonist. He's curious and adventurous - more than the average person. What more can I say? Plot: So far, it's looking like a good 'isekai-type' adventure. My only complaint is that it's a bit slow. So far, we're in the real world, researching, then go to this new world (Forrest) and then he's at a meadow by the end of chapter 2. Bot counting 'Nightshade', it took us 4 chapters to get here, but I think it could've been done in two (maybe even by just stitching the chapters together and tweaking some things). Chapter 2+3 and Chapter 4+5+6. I'm not saying you should change it that way, but it just feels like a natural progression of plot for me. Final Review: Too many prologues, good writing, and good characters, but Kael talks to himself too much, the plot is fine, but the pacing is a bit slow. Overall, I think this is a good start but of course, you can revise the chapters f you want to. What I like to do is keep a 'definitive' edition in a Google doc, as the final product which encompasses all the chapters. There I make changes like swapping chapters and such. I have a pipedream of publishing so, lol. So far so good, 8/10.

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ChiseledMystic

While writing this review, there are just three chapters. The story has great potential with a unique plot. I believe the author has excellent ideas for creating the world. Overall great read. Waiting for more chapters.

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BlueJeans

This book have really a good start introducing the earlier stage of protagonist. Each chapter consist a good amount or words, so it's not that short and not that long. Since it seem to develop slowly, reader must be patience and take your time reading this book. I still not quite grasp about the world background, we might get more description on the world building of the story.Its really refreshing to read a book that not similiar plot like those popular book in this platform. I hope as the author progressing the story. It plot development will get better and unique. Overall, this book is recommended. I hope you guys also try to give it a chance.

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Maeve_Lindley

(part of review swap) I think you have a great plot and sorry here. while it is not my cup of tea, your writing and description is great. you really set the scenes well and give insight into the characters experiences. this is a great adventure and mystery story. I am unsure about the 'glossary' page at the start but I did see a comment asking for one from a reader. you take on feedback and give the readers what they want! great stuff keep going 👏

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superAyan

I always enjoyed reading novels where the narration's delving into serving such figurative and descriptive sentences to the readers. Like the author can make something poetic out of a very simple detail. Imagery is good and writing is great! Also I can tell the author has a wide range of vocab. This book is a good read! 🙌🙌💯

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Carmen_Kingsman

The author wrote coolly. You can get into the atmosphere of the story and laugh with the characters. But I would advise to add more characters and add more sharp turns in the plot so that the readers are close to having a stroke.And so I wish the author patience to complete the book. We are with you bro)

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HouseOfLee

It’s unique, very intriguing to read. You’re a talented writer, the story brought me into its world and I felt like I was there. Keep up the amazing work!

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Merlin_duke

love the story has great descriptive moments the plot is well balanced although 3 prologue is new to me i was planning just to skip it and head to the chapter but i'm glad i didn't do that cause it was a great beginning for the main character im on the last chapter right now i look forward to your next chapter

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Jadeite_Green

Very good! I'm thoroughly enjoying the setting of your story. The way you've built it up is impressive. Personally, I'm eager to explore similar themes in my writing, particularly when it involves action. So If you're open to it, could you possibly provide me with some advice on crafting engaging action or fighting scenes?😅😅

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Loctovia

Mystery! Love those! Added to my library to keep up with the story. The opening chapters did exactly what they should. They drew me in enough to know more. The setting and world-building are on point. Overall, i think that this is a good execution a brilliant idea, at least from the few chapters i read. Keep up the good work author [img=recommend]

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Cloudee77

Your attention to details are really nice. there is plentiful imagery to set a tone for the following action, interesting as it sounds if does at moments feel a bit too descriptive. I find that issue in my own writing so, I can't say what needs to be averted, but i personally like descriptions a lot, small details, sounds, action and emotions. I liked your writing, and I wish you best, please continue writing with as much vigor and joy as you did in the beginning. It shows.

I very like the concept of 32 year old as a main character it gives a new motion for the story and the concept of the story is very well maintained and well described i will look forward to your other chapters i will be waiting keep up the good work

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Supreme_V

Story is good and interesting and character designing and world building is also really good , there is no grammar mistakes as well overall this is a rare novel.

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LordShivaStories

Very good and interesting novel with huge potential sure there is a kind of info dump at the beginning but it's ok. The intro is long but after the intro the real story starts. Descriptions are top notch but it may get a little bit extreme some time. I also love the pacing, world building and characters. I definitely recommend.

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Zetronys

It's the second novel I've read by the author, (he dropped the first one): ), this is without a doubt a demonstration of the author's progress as a writer, I won't say anything more than that, read it and draw your own conclusion

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InkDreamer07

Bro story is good and have potential, I like your magic system and the way describe it, good work keep going 🔥

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GMSJakers

I would say in all honesty, it's a good book. Although the author did say that the first chapter is a full on information, I would say it would be best to sort of explain or reveal it through the story, instead of a list of requirements to know before starting the story. But it's definitely a good book.

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Sleds_Writer

Everything is well detailed (a little too much at times) but I must say that I went through it several times before finishing the prologue which can be a bit long for some readers who will give up before arriving at the first chapter. For a reincarnation tag story, the introduction is long, but if you stay hooked you will get an interesting story as a reward. This novel looks more like a "book" for me than a classic webnovel, it can please depending on the readers and I think the author target a particular audience for his book.