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Zach Coleman, is a lover of SCP. He's been on the wiki for some years, loving some articles, hating others. Overall he's been pretty content on where the wiki was going over the years. But what will he think about one of his favorite universes when he's pulled into it?
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I had a whole proper review written out for this but decided to just backspace all of it away. I'm going to say what I want here, not as a review, but as advice. Firstly, where's the synopsis? The only reason I clicked on this was that the title pretty much said it all, but without a decent synopsis, lots of people are just going to skim past it. Your writing style is confusing and could use some work. The best advice I can give is for you to read some of the well-known stories on this platform and take note of how they do certain things, such as how exactly the character speak and what the follow-up text is for it, the rough estimate length of a paragraph, the background of characters, and so forth. The formatting could use some work. The "paragraphs" are far too long. Additional information should go to the additional information section, not in the middle of a chapter. That's the biggest problem of this story so far. Work a bit more on the characters as well. Like, make a character sheet of every character and give them like 20 characteristics, traits, abilities, personality types, etc that make them unique. Don't introduce most of these traits into the story directly, but rather take a roundabout approach. An example of a fairly well-structured paragraph with decent vocabulary that helps portray some of the characteristics of Zach: 'Despite Zach's prior fear when he learned about the foundation kidnapping him, a blooming sense of excitement welled up from his' depths after realizing where exactly he was; Inside of the very SCP Foundation that he respected! The idea of being able to use his omniscient-like knowledge to explore The Foundation would have been a rather thrilling one if only the guards weren't holding him at gunpoint; His anxiety well on its way back to cloud his judgment once again.' Other than those main pointers, there are a few things here and there that could use working on, but they aren't detrimental to the story. Just focus on getting a better writing style and fixing the formatting first. ~Some guy who cried after reading SCP-1762.
First off this is going to be a complaint or just hating I guess so don’t really expect Constructive Criticism.. Now that’s out of the way 1 reason on why I don’t like this FF would be how MC just interact with the SCP Verse. He was literally so emotional in the 1 chapter for family but the moment he knows that he is in the SCP verse he suddenly forgets them and then literally has the biggest hero complex ever to just save the tragic SCP that were kill/abandoned/forgetten by the Foundation when he literally says that he knows more than the Foundation so he should at the bare minimum think of the perspective the foundation do to these SCP. 2 Reason he knows that these are fictional character but idk if I understand what Author is trying to say but he thinks he can’t essentially be killed since he is from the “real world” where as the SCP is just fictional. Final reason MC to support the Hero complex is the fact that he automatically and I mean automatically make it sounds like the foundation is the Big Evil Villain of the story while he is the Hero💀 I‘ll just be giving this 3 since No story so far in my experience can make me give a 1 other than GhostyZ himself but thats another story
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Author, please stop rewriting the story and make it larger with more chapters it doesn't really matter about the rest. I know you may be saying its not good enough but trust me it is
very awesome im an scp fan myself and i love it. the book and the characters are great, also its very accurate i would love to see him fighting some famous scps.
Hey guys, author here. I really hope that you guys enjoy this book. And it's also on wattpad and fanfiction.net. But I hope that you enjoy this book!