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Shattered Innocence: Transmigrated Into a Novel as an Extra
4.17 (108 ratings)
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Abandoned on the battlefield, all he could do was endure the hellish life.
He had no family to rely on, as they had turned their backs on him.
A soul from the battlefield, Lucavion Thorne.
But apparently, he was a lot more than a mere soldier, as fate had many things stored for him.
A soul from Earth....When they merged, he realized.
He was a one-chapter villain whose sole purpose was to serve as a background setting for the protagonist's tragedy.
But was he truly a one-chapter villain, or did fate still have some tricks up its sleeve?
Watch the story of Lucavion Thorne as he finds the purpose behind his transmigration and discovers his own fate.
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One or two chapters daily.
Chapter Length 1500-2000
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man!!! the story would have been perfect with some revenge but author made the MC too soft. ruined the story for me and what's the point of reincarnation when he no longer remembers his old memories
Bruh if you are going to write by using A.I. then make it less obvious. I am 43 chapters in, and it is painful how all the internal monologues are just repeated ideas in different wording. When other characters face off, like in chap 43, then it is obvious that an A.I. is narrating the emotions and dialogue. If you are not using A.I. then you are simply overdoing it - there are better ways to describe character emotions and development.
The writing is good and all, I actually really like the background and story progression since it seems to stray from the op mc cliche; however, there are firstly, some fillers that I cannot understand why they're there other than to make the readers irritated. On top of that, the novel doesn't need the transmigration tag because for as long as I read, few dozens chapters in, you could've removed the transmigration tag and the introduction chapter, and it would be the exact same thing, like there would be no major differences whatsoever. The tag itself feels like a cheap attempt at clickbaiting that unfortunately worked, reading this novel, for me, was like having fishbone stuck in your throat-- Like I know it supposed to be a tragedy and all, I can perfectly comprehend that, but at least, AT LEAST, makes it so that the transmigrator is actually unique somewhat compared to the native denizens.
Writing quality is superb Updating stability nothing to say Story and character development. If there were tragedy and slow paced tags I won’t be frustrated 49 chapters in and mc is still canon fodder The frustration is just killing me Everyone seems to bully mc alone and despite his so called star devouring (spoiler) some rank 3 bozo is like heaven while he’s earth(apparently not as talented it’s made to be) If you like slow paced novels where mc is traumatized in more than 30 chapters while growing like a snail this book is for you
five star from me, cuz why not. i enjoyed both of authors previous works. all the best for this book also.
Sigh again another good novel yet ruined by the MC’s personality. Apparently a whole grown man acts like a manchild. Gets “red faced” approaching probably younger women than him. This is getting cringier and cringier with chapters. I expected a more cold,calculative,ruthless approach not some “Lost child depressive stupidity” approach
I may be biased due to reading the author other works (Hunter Academy: Revenge of the Weakest) This is very good start. Still too early to give my full thoughts of the story but from knowing the author previous work I know I'm going to love this story. One thing I love what the author does is he takes his time with the main character development and power level. I am so tired of reading a op main character who barley worked hard to obtain their power. shattered innocents we see the mc struggle and I am so excited to see how he will prevail and get back at everyone who wronged him. Maybe I'm just odd but I like seeing a main character who we see starts at the bottom and crawl their way to the top. Overall, I'm quite excited to see how this story will unravel. i do hope the author will have the main character have guy friends (I do not mean Bl lol) Typically with stories with harems the mc only surrounded by women. They don't have guy friends if they do it's like comedy relief. I hope I explain that well like I want the mc having his own group his bros. I hope explained what I thought well this was my first time writing a review so if I made a mistake cut me some slack.
The story feels slow, with the author constantly reiterating the same points. Initially, I had high expectations because it seemed different from the typical MC template, but unfortunately, it hasn’t delivered. I’m currently at chapter 87, and nothing significant has happened. The author could have condensed the story into 47 chapters, but instead, it stretched out with lengthy inner monologues. It’s been challenging to overlook this, though I do like the protagonist’s power concept. Since I'm still at chapter 87, I can’t comment too much on that yet. To Darkness_Enjoyer, I just hope the you can cut down on the repeated points to improve the novel. For instance, G3 often repeats explanations but does it in an engaging way, so I never think of it as "yapping." If you’re unable to make these moments engaging, it may be better to cut them down. But ultimately, it's your choice it's your novel. I'm just a reader, and I don't have any experience in writing, so I may not fully understand the challenges writers face. Regardless, I hope you do well with it.
I'm sorry for my English, but I love reading so much that even Google Translate doesn't become an obstacle. The story started fantastically, the atmosphere, the tension, even through the translator, the flow of words captured me headlong. It was the first time in a very long time that a short story could evoke such strong emotions in me. I thought it was a masterpiece! But I was very much mistaken... Up until the hero's escape from the battlefield into the forest, everything was gorgeous, not a single unnecessary phrase of an event or character, at least I didn't notice any flaws, but then it went downhill. If earlier I couldn't tear myself away from the work, then when the forest arch came I thought ‘when will it finally end?’ It was very boring and unnecessary. The hero could have understood the power of death on the battlefield or later and nothing would have changed. The quest with the new sword is also not very good. The feeling of ‘the hero needs a sword at any cost’ was rather ‘it would be nice to get a sword’. Yes, we were shown that the current sword would not withstand the new power, but in the same chapter we were told that it was due to a lack of control. The value of the new sword plummets. But this is nothing compared to the most disappointing thing. The hero suddenly, for no apparent reason, became a sage of psychology and philosophy. When he was giving advice to a girl from a military camp, it seemed logical, the hero was sharing his own experience. However, after leaving the forest, the hero begins to teach a mythical beast, sees through every person, has deep philosophical conversations and is generally the coolest schemer in the world.I have only one question: where in this damned forest can I sign up for courses in philosophy and psychology? Why is the hero so playful? Did he learn this on the battlefield where death is everywhere? Or maybe in a forest filled with monsters? Where did this change come from? But if the author wants to... Cat, absolutely useless and unnecessary character 227 chapter and only three useful things she did: taught the hero the fire of life, helped to tie up the bandits 1 time, and helped to absorb the energy of death from the fish. I love cats, but I have never seen such a useless character in my life. And finally, the last drawback. The author has a stereotype that men don't understand hints. That is, men do not understand the true meaning of their partner's words. Words that are spoken with the mouth. But in this work, I noticed a thing that every character, from an aristocrat to a waitress in a distant village, understands on an instinctive level what a subtle glint in the eyes, a subtle change in tone, a subtle change in smile, and the rest of the body language means. All the people in the novel are lie detectors of the highest level. That's why I was very curious when the author sat on the splits. I mean the episode when the pink knight noticed how the hero's expression changed when he looked at the dumplings, and did not understand the hints of the girl from the Cult. It's a fiasco when the hero needs to understand what lies behind the glint in the eye and the same hero doesn't understand the hints in words!!!!
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The story is quite interesting, especially at the beginning BUT, it's so damn slow. It takes like 20 chapters for the MC to get dressed and eat breakfast (not literally, but honestly I've skipped multiple chapters at a time, and not felt like I've missed anything).
15 Chapters Long prologue. Supreme Use Of Chatgpt. Waste Of Time. I Regret Reading It. I really should have read The reviews first.
suprisingly bad for how well it starts, too many shallow characters and dialogue, protagonist has murder addiction, its tecnically a transmigation but a large part of it doesn't feel like it, there too much unecessary exposition and kinda repetitive, some things even get repeated in another pov. At some point i just started skipping stuff and it didn't feel like i missed anything important
good story, only if u have the patience as it will take a minimum of 5000chapters if the author planning to finish this novel that to its just my guess. that's how slow paced and dragging the chapters are when there is no need to do so.
The novel was initially good but to be honest the quality declined over time and the fillers were very numerous, such as repeating events that had already occurred, the intention was obviously to add words in order to have more premium chapters, but as previously reviewed, boring, a lot of plot armor, and the quality decreased due to the number of unnecessary fillers.
I don't think I have read a novel with so much information about the mc has already been established primarily about his powers...and then he goes to the acedemy. all these mc's in novles are op in the acedemy day one with no background, its refreshing to see why this time around.
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it was going great until the mc met the female protag again and after he ruined her life and her hater for him she somehow forgot his face that right that can tell you how bad the rest of the novel is gonna be
Just an opinion after I read few chapters... the author uses purple proses a bit too much. The excessive descriptions are unnecessary and to the point of obsession. 🤢 It doesn't change at all. NOT. AT. ALL. More I read, more I get that. Overall story is good but the roundabout narration seems deliberate only to increase the number of words to reach the per chapter word quota and hence, individually the chapter lack substance. The world setting seems alright (though much wasn't revealed), the character design was likeable too, even the plot development was great. However, the purple proses are what make it shit for me. I know that only shows how dedicated the author is towards certain details but they really are unnecessary. Better to burn your brain cells on something else for efficient writing - that's what I want to say.
Bro, have you really given up on EROTIC RPG ??you took a new novel ,which you are going to update 1 chapter everyday . But you haven't updated a single chapter of erotic rpg for 6 month straight. Now you are treating it like middle child .
Hello, Author here. In this thread, I will clarify some questions regarding the start of the book, and you can treat it as a Q&A as well. Firstly, the novel will seem a little odd to you at the start since it starts differently. But, I must insist that you read the free chapters, the first volume, until the end and bear with it a little since it is just an introduction to the work. I know at the start of the novel, Lucavion doesn't start as your typical main character of such novels, which is something I intended since, at the start of the novel, the main character is 14 years old and mentally unstable due to all the events surrounding him. Even though I know it may be frustrating to read a little, I also think that it is an accurate description of how a person who was put into such a position would think at those moments and the type of psychology that they would have. However, at the end of the first volume, his mentality and everything will have undergone a huge change, making it a lot more readable, and from then on, the story will stretch with many interpersonal relationships going on. For now, this is all I have to say about the book, and you may continue with your questions here. I will answer them if I can.