The Unordinary Case of Whispering Pines

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Francis_Oks

I must say that after you read my book, I checked your profile out. This book is interesting but for a new book your update timing is poor, so far you've had a balanced story line, but I need to see some sort of horror and mystery in your novel. Do all this and you will get 5 stars.

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Miguelbhgas

Hello kc, I recentely stumbled upon your book while looking for horror/ mystery books, and I have to say that so far your world building isn’t too great right now and your character development is also lacking, but that can be attributed to the fact that your still a new writer and you only have 2 chapters including a prologue. I would recommend you to take more time in future chapters and to not rush your work. Also try using other resources like YouTube and other web novels to gain some experience, overall though your book is ok at best right now.

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Bummer

Cool concept. The idea of a untrustworthy and shifty kind of town, while not unique, is certainly interesting to write about. I like some of the world building done to the story. Additionally, the characters have some promise and the town in itself is showing some great signs of intrigue and curiousity (to me). However, I'm going to be honest. This could use some improvement. The writing quality is debatable, sometimes being tolerable. Other times, it becomes detrimental to the flow of the story. The characters' growth and depictions are somewhat flat and confusing. The setting and plot are a little confusing and contradicting each other (and while the author has stated that most of the points I made about the plot are intentional, a better communication of the intentionality, whether be through further descriptions of those details, would help). And overall, the length of the novel's chapters are too short to fully immerse me into the plot, nor fully keep me compelled with its story (although some events do spike my interest in the novel). Overall, it has real potential, and noting the author's nice recieving of my criticisms and promise to improve the novel, I have hopes for this. For now, this review simply states that it is interesting and cool but lacking in depth, sophistication, and cues. Still, can't wait to see what's next.

So far an amazing mystery book with a sense of mystery and thriller, hopefully the author can use more time to update ans focus on his book to release more chapters