DaoistHunterReborn

DaoistHunterReborn

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DaoistHunterReborn
DaoistHunterReborn
1 years ago
Commented

I legit hate Gloria but without her strong personality it would be a boring female lead. Her male/sexist stance is still pretty gross though, and her ability to lack humility at her own failure to shine a fraction of ves is sorta gross.. almost every direct benefit she got is due to ves and not her own success and she would be decades behind if not more without him.

DaoistHunterReborn
DaoistHunterReborn
2 years ago
Commented

You can’t have a constant build up and action it devalues it when you have action.. DBZ power creep or one piece is a good example. You should reference mech touch. It done a great job of not creating a overpowered lead. I have seen many stories where the outcome became very clear and it repeated many story points multiple times becoming very boring. You have reached a wonderful balance and I think your only objective should be to figure out how long it will take to tell your story. It clear based on his power level that once Micheal hits tier 6 or 7 he would be undefeatable. So, you might want to prolong his growth and figure out a balance on his journey in origin. You currently have not really explored much of origin expanse or the great universe

DaoistHunterReborn
DaoistHunterReborn
2 years ago
Replied to Ki_2974

There was also a lot of filler so far there very little to be lost in the last 3 chapters since his return to his land… while interesting how his summons progressed can be, and it adds depth the most impactful comment so far is the foreshadowing of the red dragon child, and the Savanah alliances..

DaoistHunterReborn
DaoistHunterReborn
2 years ago
Commented

Why not 2 chapters today

DaoistHunterReborn
DaoistHunterReborn
3 years ago
Posted

Great start but power creep starting to show and the novel takes really weird turns. Examples at times the mc fails to decide if he wants a harem or not, but to make matters worse he seems very inconsistent sometimes he appears to have zero sexual desires than he banging Rina. He also appears to have zero concern 2 party members never returned Helena and Anna.. I am hoping some character development will solve this but seems more like a writing issue. A journey that was suppose to take a week drag on for over a month and later 2 months and barely any mention of them. In fact the same thing happened with sera and he just shrugs it off. The other concern is power creep, he appears to recent kill a rank b monster almost by himself saving a village. He went from weak guy barely able to kill a goblin to slaying a rank c adventure to slaying a rank b beast in less than 9 chapters. Let’ not forget it was mentioned beast took a party of sme rank to kill. Great novel but worried if it has the depth to last 1000’s of chapters with how the journey progressing…

DaoistHunterReborn
DaoistHunterReborn
3 years ago
Posted

Novel ruined after the first volume.. For whatever reason the author decides to kill off a core part of the story, aka mmo aspect.. What worse is how dumb the story read for the ending.. the mortal had over 5 million converted and some how couldn’ afford 5k a month apartment?? Was in business classes and knew stock knowledge sold high and goes and works on a farm with even a 3% return rate on 5mil being 150k not even mentioning how his family was poor and suggested 30k was there yearly in early chapters.. if you check the new chapters following it appears to become just another cultivation novel.

DaoistHunterReborn
DaoistHunterReborn
5 years ago
Commented

Woot woot love this novel

DaoistHunterReborn
DaoistHunterReborn
5 years ago
Commented

Love this novel

DaoistHunterReborn
DaoistHunterReborn
5 years ago
Commented

Keep st it great job

DaoistHunterReborn
DaoistHunterReborn
5 years ago
Replied to litrpg

Lol