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in this FanFiction MC develop his strength , character and friends gradually, FanFiction has some logic not like those half brain ones. FanFiction explore other characters too ,this FanFiction has more than MCU in a good way like She Hulk
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Please comment your thoughts and reactions much appreciated. ..............................................................................Not my original work . Read it on fan fiction . net Credit for this brilliant piece goes to original author ( Mahmoud Schahed / Desert chocolate). ................ just sharing his work with his permission .............................., enjoy it. ............... link to original website =. https://m.fanfiction.net/s/12989970/1/Dial ................ you can contact me on. rishabhsinght168@gmail.com
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I'm Mahmoud, aka DesertChocolate. I don't mind you posting this, but if you could write my name correctly and maybe add a link to the OG story, I would appreciate it. Thank you.
Bro this story is actually my favourite of all the marvel fanfics of this length, it's really goddamn creative and I can't tell wait for new chapters whenever I open this website.
don't read this it started good but along the way it seems too much elongated and stretched for god what reason scenes to that should be two second is stretched very much long the MC continue to be thrown between knowing the knowledge of marvel and not knowing at all the MC seems to have some issues of trust he trust abunch of super spies a socially inept person and a mentally challenged person he calls them friends directly tell who ever listen that he is from another world with endless alien abilities he reveals his secret early on he put himself at the servent of others likely the MC is a submissive and tend to humiliation fetich the MC have is serving not like a si but as an oc aide kick to the avengers and the rest of shield the author seems to have some sjw leaning as he is planning to introduce the self insert of Kamala khan the author make the MC build things as somewhat of a way to show his .so called intelligence yet the things he build always have no effect for example he design a armour yet the armour almost if not break all the time also the author seems to force the MC to not go all out on his creation for no other reason as to continue to prolong the story for example he make an armour yet he make it the size of backpack to be weared instead of making a nanobot armour that is stored in their spine like bleeding edge iron man armor and for a fact the MC seems to have absurd marvel knowledge so he should be know this also the author tends to add irrelevant scenes just to prolong the chapters I noticed this since he started with patreon thing with chapters about character that you will never care about that much like agents of shield crew or the rest shield to the point it's just skip skip and skip the MC tends to frustrate alot of the times for naivity and cluenesse es also the MC has no future goals or aspirations outside of being avengers best lapdos and sidekick the author seems to not notice that his character lost its charms he reveals his weakness gets trashed alot and not using his alien transformations to their full potential and now he revealed his secret of being a transmigrator to his she hulk girlfriend of his and added deadpool to the mix so basically the MC has become a trash oc without any desires to grow stronger or get anything yet the author ses hell bent on doing his version of the movies without knowing he already screwed the plot all together also the author seems to try to do some foreshadowing yet he truly doing it in a stupidest way possible the MC says he talked to Tony about thanos yet he made no further comment outside of that he didn't tell he has some way of defeating him or anything just yeah there is thanos the MC seems to not has the marvel knowledge at the moment needs only when the author allows it for example he doesn't suspect the aether the tessarect or even Loki sceptre to be infinity stones or anything he let those big events that is related to them just slip by to conclude the story was very good at the start yet get down hill we earlier to the point that most of the earlier readers left it the author seems to have dropped to trap of patreon yes men and huge ego as he thinks as his story doesn't have anyone who truly criticize him over it I mean the narrative not the grammar and he doesn't even realize or ask about it overall not a good read
i loved it when it first started. in mcu with omnitrix it was cool 😎😎 But too much monologue, dumbest mc and the "they can kill me but i can only kock them " cuz they r not bad guz. Like fuckkkk. they ****ing thew grenade with out a freaking single word n u just let it be!? Instead of gathering useful info and correcting memories he goes to hammer building to earn money. and wtf can't go master control then don't act all mighty and put ur nose out of shits 💩💩💩 you know it could have been The Best If u have used some fictional senses instead of go with the plot shit. im dropping it hope i find a better one,,
Mc is below average intelligence. Possible IQ below 70. Between ch 1 to ch 2 two months go by and he never uses gray matter alien to increase intelligence to get identification or source of money. This is what a normal person would do shortly after being dumped into mcu.
Everything is great apart from the Mc. The Mc has a severe fanboy problem. Its so bad that he willing tells them everything about the Omnitrix and I don't think you need to be a genius to know that is not something you share. I lost all hope when he shared that he can remove the Omnitrix. He basically announced "you just have to force me and you too can be the holder of the Omnitrix" Seriously he trusts spy agency with his knowledge and that's a mistake in itself. My rating is high because the only problem is the Mc's fanboy personality negates common sense.
I read until chapter 32, removing the obvious mental deficiency of the protagonist, the plot that starts interesting ends up being dragged to the point of being an uninteresting plot, where despite having everything ready to close the arc, the author insists on the continuation. I do not recommend reading this fic expectantly, reading to pass the time, but know that you will be angry.
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MC is stupid, his IQ is almost negative, he is transmigrated but he has no knowledge of the MCU, that is to say nothing, totally stupid without a goal, he wants to be a hero and that's all, the guy's life is to stay awake dawn beating a thief, a stupid MC with no goals and not even a knowledge of transmigrate, he looks like a child
😥 I couldn't make it past the first 5 chapters, interesting topic the Mc is written in such a boring way n the first chapters which r suppose to entice u...r so uninteresting n has u ask why tf is the Mc doing what he's doing.i couldddd go on but i dont wana
My Brain is damaged. My last two brain cells are working overtime to write this message. aagghhhhhh nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
Brasileiro aqui então não sei muito se isso vai funcionar, mas, se alguém entender, a maioria das resenhas não pazsaram do 2 capitulo e perceberam que o personagem recebe Aliens no meio da história, até mesmo o Ben precisou usar o relógio um tempo para ter mais aliens, só que o autor começou diferente, com aliens diferentes, o mc não é ben tennyson ele não tem os mesmos aliens iniciais, fora essas criticas sem base, a historia é muito boa, quando você acha que um arco vai ser chato o autor te surpreende com algo incrivel, sempre mostrando histórias diferenciadas do padrão de fanfics da Marcel e pelo menos pra mim por enquanto bem melhor que muitos ai, um dos melhores na verdade, então se você leu os dois primeiros capitulos e ja fez a resenha sem ter visto o resto, eu digo que você não sabe o que perdeu e meio que foi um idiota ao falar de algo que não sabia, eu recomendo pra quem quiser e entender minha resenha, só isso.
First review but this... Honestly this is a good fic like stop reading my review and read this masterpiece, i love the original concepts such as Winter Guard and the take on Creel and every character has nice development and its a great story with good original concepts and a good plot with characters that are really good. grammar is nigh perfect with only slight easily fixed errors, the world building is nice like the expansion on things like the savage lands and the fic honestly seems like a proffesional writer most times. If you like Ben 10 and Marvel this is for you. If I were to rate it. Plot: 10/10 The concepts are original, however it starts a tad slow in the beginning but in my opinion it was fine some may not enjoy the slower beginning pace but stay strong and keep reading. Character design and development 10/10 Characters dont start perfect but they steadily get better and learn from previous mistakes really giving the readers satisfaction when you see our amazing MC learn and grow as the story progresses, like author really nailed the progression speed, not too slow, not too quick. World Building Again 10/10 Since its a fic it doesnt need much world building since marvel itself does that, however it does have interesting spins on already existing places or comepletely new ones. Like the secret bases in the Hydra War Arc Grammar 9.9/10 like honestly it really is top notch and at the beginning there were slight mistakes but it steadily improved so I would give it 10/10 but those havent been edited. All in all its an amazing fic with an amazing author, take my vote man.
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It is the best story with the omnitrix, I like how the character interacts with everyone in general, as you put some, in general it is a splendid, entertaining and forceful story.
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Too much ranting that makes the story so much irritating that I couldn’t go beyond initial two chapters. Most of readers reading a crossover fan fiction would know at least know one of story. For remaining readers there is comments by other readers.
oh is this fanfic good, keep up the good work author. ............................................................................ What I'm not going to ruin the surprise that is this fanfic. Read it your self!!!
loving it hope to see more episodes soon...............................................................................................................................
I enjoy this immensely I can't wait until the next chapter comes out until more progress happens that wait until the phones at Masters his abilities I recommend this for anyone who likes Ben 10 and The Avengers