/ War / Dan Walker : Outbreak
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After a horrible accident at a local Laboratory, a hazardous virus is set free, turning everyone that contacts it into flesh eaten Monsters.
On a peaceful Scavenger Run, you meet two Fox Girls which seem to be lost, you take them in and let them decide if they want to stay by your side.
NATO and Russia compete for the Country that now is in ruin, each trying to gain more land by the day.A War has started between the Soldiers of the two Parties, but also the Local Folks which didn't ally with any of the two Major Powers.
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Loving this story so far. Right from the opening chapter with a countdown to the end of the world as the protagonist is going about his everyday business, the author had me hooked. From there it only got better. Some really efficient world building and an extremely entertaining and colorful cast of characters kept me having to read more. Loving the post-apocalyptic world complete with zombies and warring factions. And the two fox sisters certainly had me laughing in places. Eager to see what their story is. The writing style was unique and took a bit to get used to, but once I got into the story it was just like reading any other form of enjoyable, quality fiction. Full marks for sheer entertainment value. I added this to my library as I need to see where this wild adventure goes in future installments. Highly recommend giving this one a go!
I actually like where this story is going :D Apocalypse feel of the story is well brought out, characters are put together well and the overall plot is interesting. Just put some touches on your writing style and you're on your way to the top XD
There are some great things about this novel. The world building is great, very immersive right from the start. The author has a very unique writing style, which can be a bit jarring but generally is nice to read. A couple of grammatical errors, but nothing too major, as it still makes for a fun read. Its very action packed, great with the description, while also being wholesome and cute at times. Its a combo that I really enjoyed when reading. Would recommend! Great work author
I think the content of the story is very interesting, the setting is very nice! The grammar and punctuations though need some work. I would suggest letting someone edit this as the story would come out a lot better if this issue gets solved. I would use the program grammar as well, I use it myself too. It does wonders! And like someone else commented, read your phrases out loud, that works great for me as well! You can see in your work that you really like writing! I would say, keep it up! It's always good to do something you love! Cheers!
I keep my word and leave my review. Please take a look at mine. First of all, there are quite a few chapters, so I have to honestly state that I cannot read all of them. So I will evaluate the basics. First of all, I liked the writing language and I liked the way of narrating the events. You have chosen a topic that is really successful and attracts attention. Section length is also satisfactory. I like the series and I suggest those who hesitate to read it.
I like the apocalypse story. :) This is one of the interesting ones. It has a solid character building and a nice world background. However, sometimes in the first few chapters, the way the author describes seems to lack a transition phase, making it not smooth. The later chapters seem to be better though. Overall, it is a good novel. Definitely, adding it to my collection. Good job, author!
Alright a few things you could fix and i think you would have a great story here. Honest review for you. First is the writing style, this is my opinion but also based on good story. Starting off sentences with the same words and a strong 3rd person telling of the story makes it difficult to attach yourself to the MC. I would say expand your vocabulary usage with other synonyms and add a bit of the MC's emotions in the mix to really invest the reader. Great website I use for my story when I want more variety in my vocabulary. https://***.wordhippo.com/ Also the story development is still early but I would say to add something that makes it stand out. Currently it's fine since you have a lot of plot ahead but it never hurts to start early. World background is concise with little to be confused about. Also like how you distinguished the different camps and their ruling style. It's realistic and makes sense. Overall you have a good story that just needs a few tweaks to make it a reall addictive page turner! I believe in you author! :)
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Grammar and Storytelling and everything else, get better as the novel progresses. Stay Tuned! Just reviewing my own Story, nothing shameless.
Honest review, this needs work. Aside from the grammar and punctuation issues, which could be a translation issue, the story is very plodding. The use of second-person narrative is interesting, and easily the best part about the story thus far. But there are no details in the writing and people don't act like they would in real life.
This story is lit! With a talented author, this novel was in good hands. I gotta say I'm impressed! Accompanied with hard work and perseverance, this will pave well in the future! Good luck author and may your novel be blessed with more readers!