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A young man dies full of regret with his monotonous life of emptiness. He finds himself in a dark space. One thing leads to another and off on an adventure he goes.
First World: Naruto
First time author here folks. Just trying my own take on a fanfic here. I'll try to post a chapter a day. Please feel free to post your criticism and opinions on the story. I'll try to incorporate everything I see and make it better.
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3 stars for mass release and kudos for you to converting the ATG PL to naruto. -No CD, theres no character development what so ever in you story, Your MC just trains and talks with system, no interaction between characters other than talking here and there and suddenly in C15 he pissed ad his gramps condition. there was barely any interaction between em before. And above all the MC is bland and has no real purpose, just does shit for the sake of it. -No exploration or addition of new things, not even characters. You got an entire village and people but none of it is explored [ as of C15]. And after c15 he meets and talks but its just bland, training, MC showing jutsu with no training, gramps going oh thats my grandson and acting like its nothing? its OOC, no hint of a war veteran or a leader who is in war times, rather some peaceful old man who dosnt care. This is was stupid, they are in turbulent times and the old man accepts this shit? -And you did mention new mountain range/place but thats all, no exploration of it. You should've explored the working of kumo, -Plus the starting chps were all system and jargon whist the rest are just training, info, or something like that. moments of MC getting stronger, no actual story or plot. honestly feels like a training manual listing what someone did to get stronger. And then theres the power. you've introduced ATG thing but other than the PL and body and veins, its all naruto and other world shit like demon slayer or observation haki. you've failed at using/exploring the ATG power in naruto. And not sure if you know this, even with the conversation ATG is a world where the cannon fodders were easy god madara to kaguya [ this is not an exaggeration, ]..it ATG, yun che in his starting moments earth profound could easily lift sword weighing tons, or the budda art that giving pure physical strength that drawfs any and all in naruto verse minus god tiers [ wiki: First Stage - Provides strength of one thousand five hundred kilos. just physical strength. MC already a god by 4th stage and it provide durability ]. All in all its just bland and boring, with barely any CD or WD and the ATG is just useless, as it really serves no purpose, plus just butchers you story cause that verse things are too OP for naruto. The moments mentioned in the story are either MC training or fighting, no actual content or character interactions. [ the one with samui, gramps, or training were just talking about MC doing jutsu ] -- I just removing the training moments and explore the world and character interactions properly
the story is good and it would be better if you give him a small harem of 3 or 4.......................................................................................
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Carbon copy from Divine Anime System and similiar fics but butchered brutalized with 1D characters. System reliant simp just so happens to be reincarnation of Chad and he has enemies from past life or something (didn't read past chapter 10 but I can literally smell this development). And start is completely useless no character development. I really hate those fics with system that tells protagonist how to sh*t with his pants down.
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this story is like drugs, you can't stop reading it, it's so good lol, the grammar is very good too so you will have smooth ride reading this
it was a great mc is not so op but grows with time it's just that he is an ungreatfull bast*rd who scolds his system for every thing he even forgets that she is the reason he is Alive ๐ค
Me ha encantado, lo leรญ en un dรญa. Me deprime ver quรฉ lo has dejado caer(?) Es interesante el que estรฉ en otra aldea y no en Konoha y me gusta bastante MC Espero vuelvas pronto:(
Salah satu fanfic Naruto terbaik. Mengambil sisi Kumogakure sebagai latar belakang, tapi dari sini aku bisa menyimpulkan bahwa banyak penulis yang membuat MC Kumo selalu cenderung terikat dengan Raikage. Berbeda dengan MC yang mengambil latar belakang desa lain, kebanyakan dari mereka berani untuk mengambil latar sipil dan menggeluti latar cerita yang lebih keras terutama dari sisi politik dan kehidupan Shinobi. Walau demikian cerita ini sendiri cukup menarik dengan segala kemudahan yang dimiliki oleh MC. Aku membacanya beberapa bulan yang lalu dan membacanya lagi sekarang untuk melihat kelanjutannya. Sayangnya penulis belum melanjutkan ceritanya ๐ Tapi aku tetap menunggu kelanjutan cerita ini, aku berharap penulis akan melanjutkan ceritanya suatu saat nanti ๐
Reached chapter 21, and it's still a training montage, the system is practically useless, it just keeps showing him skills and other stuff, with outrageous prices that he has no way of being able to put up, on top of that, with all the skills that he got from other worlds (mostly through gacha, or the starter pack), he's way too weak.
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Secara keseluruhan sangat luar biasa, karena diawal sudah di plot untuk cerita ATG, kita para pembaca dapat memastikan bahwa cerita akan berlangsung lama, karena setelah Naruto akan ada ATG. Pertanyaan nya adalah ketika menyebrang ke dunia ATG, apakah MC akan mulai dari awal cerita atau di tengah cerita? Mengingat dia pasti akan menyebrang setelah mencapai puncak Alam Ilahi. Terimakasih banyak kepada penulis untuk cerita yang luar biasa, ditunggu selalu pembaharuan nya!
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more chapters. waiting for more.โค๏ธ๐๐๐งก๐๐โค๏ธโค๏ธ๐๐๐งก๐๐โฅ๏ธ๐๐โค๏ธ๐๐๐๐๐๐งก๐งก๐๐งก๐งก๐โฅ๏ธ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โฅ๏ธ๐๐๐งก๐โค๏ธโค๏ธโค๏ธ๐๐๐๐งก๐โฅ๏ธ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐งก๐
Wow it's a great novel i love it can't wait to see more of this content ...................................................................