Endless Love (:)

LV 1

Eldritch_Umbra

For a first time novel, the writing quality is quite surprising, and is way better than my work when I first started. Naturally, with this being the first piece, it has the issues every first piece has. That being poor grammar and questionable sentence structure. Punctuation is in the wrong place, and some of the word choice is questionable. As for the characters, they are pretty good, even if some of them fall victim to tropes. (The guy has a motorcycle because why not) There aren't any issues that haven't already been addressed, so I'll just say that you have natural talent, and you'll want to work on word choice, grammar, sentence structure, and perhaps some character traits.

LV 1

The_WindChaser

Hello! I was interested in the title when I saw you text it on discord.😂 Anyways, my honest criticisms would be: -I see purple prose in your book, -wrong placements of commas and such, -too much "had", maybe try "was" or "were", -search for synonyms of words so you won't have to put "very" that often, -seperate paragraphs, it's not appealing to see blocks of texts -try to let the story flow out, and let the readers know the attitudes of your character by showing their actions. Try to limit telling their personalities right from the get-go. Lastly, you're good! Good luck in writing!

LV 4

Emmanuel_Peter203

For a still developing story, i have to say, you tried. Just needs some more editing and time. But its good for a first time novel. Keep up the good work author, and remember, I NEED CHAPTER UPDATES! lol.