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Alurik was a prince of the Kray Empire, when passing the test for magic, it turns out that he has no talent for magic. By the decision of the Emperor, the prince was abdicated from the throne and expelled from the Cray Empire to the academy in the direction of the swordsman. But when passing a simple test of his sword talent, a dormant talent emerges. Which will change his life and the world.
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I've read up to 20 ch and overall, it was quite a good read. Typical fantasy story of the chosen one who starts off as a weakling but later found himself bearing a greater power instead. The pacing is nice and the author did a good job with the world building. Author do spend his time setting up the whole background of the story. Personally, the only downside that disturbs my experience here is the word flow. Choice of words tend to make reread three times and simply translate them as to my understanding. Long sentences that could've been broken to 3-5 short ones was instead rammed together with forced commas or sometimes even worse, with none of it. The story sounded like the first draft when author write everything in his mind and simply clicked the upload button without rereading them.I understand that this is written from a first pov, like imagining myself as the mc doing this and that as a part of its daily life but most of the times, there's too many mundane actions that could've just been skipped. Ex: I eat this then drink this then after finish eating I take a bath then pack my belongings, open the door, bla bla bla. This one is personal, it is hard for me to remember the names of the characters that may be relevant like the dean, talented sister, or the brother. And the characters in the story sounds bland to me like they sounded more like an npc with no emotions. They may be described as angry or sad or what but nothing tells me about their feelings other than that single 'angry' word. In conclusion, the story is actually good, but just need some editings. Stability Update is excellent, updated daily, world background enough not too much not too little and the story development is okay, it's actually quite slow for me but still bearable.Lastly, keep up the good work. I hope this won't discourage you from writing more!
Although it took some time to read, the story proves to be excellent with captivating world-building and intriguing characters. However, I did find the grammar a bit confusing in the starting chapters. Nonetheless, I thoroughly enjoyed it and would highly recommend adding it to the library.
I hope this book get more exposure because it deserves it, the synopsis best! keep it coming author!! I'm impressed
The character of Aluric is quite Interesting. The writing is good, but I think his powers may be too strong. The writing is well done with only a few minor errors. [img=fp]
An easy 5/5 from me. The story pace is brilliant, and while it took me a day to finish reading it, it was very engaging and entertaining while also having really nuanced characters and a very detailed world. You nailed the balance between lore dropping and moving the plot. hoping to see more work from you!
The main issue with this story is the dialogue indicators. Going forward and backward, the story should be edited to have the proper quotation marks. That would further elevate the story's level from a good to great story.
You've done an outstanding job, author! Your story is exceptional, with carefully crafted characters and a captivating world. Keep up the great work. I'm thoroughly enjoying your story and eagerly anticipating more!
This novel demonstrates great potential. The author showcases a talent for crafting compelling narratives and creating well-rounded characters. Readers will be eager to see how the story unfolds in subsequent chapters. The writing quality is a standout feature of the novel. As it generally improves over time as the prose is engaging and flows smoothly, making it an enjoyable read for fans of fantasy genres. Although there are occasional minor mistakes and repetitive use of words in certain paragraphs, they don't detract significantly from the overall storytelling experience. The power-ups granted by the gods contribute to the story's epic scale, but some readers might find it slightly overpowered. A small balance adjustment could enhance the stakes and add more tension to the unfolding events. Though reading through the chapters can be short to some audiences it seemed perfectly fine for me and This is a book I'd definitely be reading during my free time. Keep up the work author!
The novel has a Interesting start with a mysterious girl in a dream. To me the pacing of the novel is quite good not too rushed but not too slow but I found quite a lot of typos in the novel. And personally I don’ prefer long paragraphs. But the author has made good choices of words in the novel. And did a good job portraying the characters
I like it so far, but the chapters are too short. I hope the upcoming chapter will be lengthy. I love Alluric's character and can't wait to read more.
the story you wrote here is a 10/10 something that I could only dream of writing, the dark fantasy genre is something that you clearly excel in keep it up author!
The plot is good but the first few chapter are too short but it's okay.. i will still continue reading it.. Good job author keep going ..
A very intriguing dark fantasy world. I like it. The storytelling is great and immersive, needing the reader's attention at every point. There are hints of a grander plot and skilful prose in the chapters with many mysteries and twists to be discovered as one reads on. Overall, a good story that definitely has potential.
Alluric has a very distinguishable character which will make readers adore him. I like how the uniqueness of the style of the novel is made.
Good plot. Overall entertaining for. It just lack character details for me but it's great. So keep up the good work and good luck on being premium soon!
I'm not really hooked at the first few chapters and even at the synopsis tbh but i keep on reading and realized that the real start of the story was from the moment Allurik was banished from the empire. The world background is good, character design was also great, and the story develops gradually. My only problem was the long paragraphs so you should work on that. Overall, this is a good read. Keep writing author!
I'm only a short bit into the story so far but I am hooked! I really like the detailing put into the characters and the world as well as how well the author describes each scene.
I read the first 5 chapters. I like it so far, especially because your novel is a contrast to the style of novel I'm learning to write. Your novel has a more serious tone, I would say even more realistic. The detailing of the characters, of the environment, makes the atmosphere much denser and deeper. As much as it's not my reading/writing style, I enjoyed it and will continue to follow your story in the future. Added to collection! It certainly is a story that seems to be very good, but I will try to learn from it too, nice to find this one! My only "criticism" is really something personal, which is the tone, I end up not being a big fan of this more serious way of writing. [img=recommend]
Interesting novel I like Aluric character design and the background of the world, The power up by the god might need a small nerf tho. The writting is nice with very few mistakes, So far at chapter 25 he just got a power up lets see how it goes :)
So from the first 18 chapters I can say the story is interesting. The story seems to be a bit of a slow burn, I had to give the author a 3 star in the writing quality category. Because the writing is good and the word choice is great but there are a lot of typos and extremely long paragraphs that feel like blocks of text. But otherwise it’s really good novel, just typos throughout the early chapter. Good novel I give it a 4.4