Not_Availablex2

This review based on Volume 1, after volume 2 i will make another one for sure Well this story take place in a fantasy world where people have magic powers and like others our main character also have a magic power 'FIRE' Roy Yagami 16 years old boy who want to become a KING aka Supreme King. So Roy sail is journey to achieve his goal along with his friends. -Writing Quality 3/5 Writing is ok, not that bad but if they work on there narration and grammar then i hope it will be become good as best (hehe) and chapters are too shot so i am expecting to get big chapters from volume 2 -Stability of Updates 4/5 U upload regularly and its good but as i mention before please publish big chapters and post at least 5 chapters in a weak -Story Development 3/5 I cant say thinking yeet about the story development cuz most of the chapters are training or doing normal missions. So lets see what is waiting in Volume 2 -Character Design 5/5 Characters are awesome and most interesting think about this story and i hope we can see more characters like Egao and Hirohito and need some more screen time for Sanji. -World Background 2/10 For now the world is not clear to me so willing to get some exploration about the world map lol Thats my Honest review. Please read it. Its a good story

I will go honest I read all 10 chapters and it was a good one You need to work on the writing quality a little, You need fix the grammar a little. I suggest you to describe the surrounding rather as you describe the chapters. Fights are good, I like when fight of the bear, its like you guys not relied on the 2nd mc but on the whole fight of Roy its like he overpowering so its kinds weird. So I aspect more improve in future your story is good but need more work on it and try to write fast. Cuz like we reader have to w8 more then 5 days for 2 chapters so at least realize more then 30 chapter then slow down and at last Story Development is good.

LV 2

temiyemi354

What caught my attention first as always was the title. The synopsis further pulled me in. The first chapter started with action then a bit of comedy. To be frank, it is my type of story, lol. But I am sure you will enjoy it too.

LV 11

Ryuu3rs

Love the World and the Characters its got a good plot I would have liked to see more World Building descriptions and expanding on already shown plots and lives would just make it more alive with how things happen to like not every chapter but every few but ultimately its a good base to keep going and I love reading it

A Gem, i would place this novel with Lot of mysterious simply based on potential, the characters aren't cutouts they make rational and irrational decisions that fit there character Im very happy that a new original has found its way to the top Pros Potential for the story to go anywhere

LV 1

CaseysPen

The highlight of this story is the author's propensity for using action to keep the pacing high and sustain the reader's attention. The drawback is the grammar usage and the sometimes lazy writing where many words are used where one will do. It does the story a disservice. The story is written in present tense, and the author handles it better than many I've read, but it will be a reader's preference decision if they are comfortable reading a present-tense story. Nice use of action though.

LV 4

Bit_Lucky

I don't really have much to say except that your writing is much better then mine and that's only because I haven't fixed about 10 or 20 that's needed fixing But anyway enough about me your story starting is all good writing quality development worldbackground. CHaracter design: I mean there acting out the characters that there supposed to be. Updates is fine (it's way better than mine which is a chapter a week) Ya better review mine since I'm not gonna let another fish go running free without me gaining something from it.

LV 11

PewPewBoomSplash

The story is interesting and the characters have the start of fun personalities, but I feel like some of them could be fleshed out more so they didn't feel like props There are minor grammar and spelling errors, but not enough to detract from immersion and

OK My Devil Is A Beautiful Female AKA MDBF is the story of a boy name Roy Yagami who wants to become the strongest. While when i was reading it seems like this story is pretty similar to Black Clover... and its give a punch right into my face and said i am different then Black Clover. At first it gives the vibe of Black Clover but after 5-6 chapter it changes the author managed to make it a tad different. While the beginning seems a bit too much like that series. Now onto the writing. It's not bad, but it could definitely improve. The writing feels well (batter then before lol) I feel like the story is becoming a lot better day by day. So just read it

LV 1

Turjo31

I've been following QuBe's works for over a year now, and they've improved a lot from when they started. There are still grammatical errors here and there, but the story is enjoyable nonetheless. Need more depth to the side characters, all they do is help/interact with the MC and that's about it. But, swords are cool, so no problem :) Also, the update feels slow from time to time. Agreed with Albedo_Dazai on that.