The Aurelian Empire

Interesting read! The book is well written with few to no grammatical mistakes; making reading smooth and enjoyable. I have almost no qualms about it. However, as an avid reader of revenge stories, I am missing the true rage from the Protagonist. I feel that if the story were to revolve around her executing revenge along with the male lead- there should be a very solid idea on why she wanted revenge. So far, all I’ve felt from her was fear and regret. Which is not a bad feeling per say, but not justifiable enough for revenge. I don’t feel betrayal, all I felt was that the villager’s actions were extreme. However, since this is only the second chapter, I can’t really say that it’s a deal breaker for the book. If there were a plot twist in later chapters or a sudden burst of anger from the protagonist, I’d say this book would be close to flawless. Just like one of the other reviewers too, chapter one( which I will comment on where I felt was a bit off) had a paragraph that threw me off. If I were to narrow down on what, I would say it is about the elder; why is he so important? Why did he ‘suddenly’ feel evil? And you referred him to as ‘the’ when the readers have yet to know the man. In all, this is a very eye catching story and plays into the idea of those typical rebirth manhwas very well. I had to really read into every sentence to spot mistakes so it just goes to show the effort and time the author put in this book. If it’s a reader’s preferred genre, this would be their perfect pick. Good job and good luck, author! :)

The writing Quality is top notch. I did stumble on some lines, which got me out of my reading Flow. But otherwise, it got me hooked. I like how the story is developing, not much known, but till know it does not sound bad. What I found a bit lacking was the Village dynamic. I was a bit Lost on the backgrounds of the Characters or what's happening. A bit more in detail of the goings around the Situation would be appreciated. Otherwise, the Characters, where Interesting, some were quite cliche I think. Which is not bad It's just that we are missing some background of why their action are like this if they had known her for long. Or if they always hated her. A reason for their action more than just the simple. I’m poor so I need money. Because of the "that" we are now like "this". More than 2 Layers are appreciated. Otherwise, it's a great beginning to a Story, with some flaws, but those are not strong enough to impact the story and can be easily explained later. With some edits on the beginning and I would not notice the difference between a Professional take on the Story and yours. Great read! P.S. I commented on the section which brought me out of the flow of reading.