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This is my first story so it might not be good. I would like it if u give me suggestions about which direction u would like the story to go and please do tell if i make mistakes in grammar please comment about it normally, calmly without being salty and when i say that u comment about it don't just say its shit but explain why its shit.
And i will write this when i have free time and when i have ideas about the story so comment and give me ideas that i can implement in my story
Not my picture, i took it from the internet.
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The mc is ran over by truck after complaining how there is no good novels about the mc being a dragon and now he has a chance to make his own draconic story with this one in a lifetime rebirth.
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good writing, good script and good characters, development leave a little to sin, but and a good story, this story has a lot of potential I dare say that it is much better than many who have read
Apologies author the reviewing is so low but like to be honest. I do enjoy ur book and if ur story becomes popular enough if u decide to continue this I promise to gift ur story because I be digging ur story
Wow, ten chapters went by so fast! 😅 I guess I'll be writing some of thoughts I have on the book now. It's your basic reincarnated as a dragon/ Status system book, and I'm not complaining, it's just that I've read quite a few of them at this point. It's got a couple things I haven't seen before- the elemental sacs were nice, and the [mutate] skill works in a different way than usual (which is a good thing). There are typos (minor ones, some of those words that sound the same but are spelled differently are in there a lot) but they can be overlooked. The mc does seem a bit temperamental in my opinion, and I was kinda bummed when it was said he didn't have the memories before the reincarnation. I know that it makes sense for him to have forgotten, but when flashbacks and little mentions of previous memories are done in a good way, it can add some depth and insight to the protagonist, and gives the readers reasons for when the mc acts a certain way. Hmm, what else... The fight scenes were pretty good. They were descriptive at the very least. Just that the sentences were a little long, which made it harder to read. Short, descriptive sentences in bursts seem to be the best way to go with action scenes. I understand that fights go really fast, but if your mc is taking a breather, it might seem like a good time to put some of the main character's reactions or thoughts into it (but not too long, otherwise it just won't make sense that he's able to think that much in a short period of time.) Actually, you could put the reactions of both sides of the fight in places that seem fitting in between the fighting, rather than having a slur of info on what happening. Also, the speech in general seems a little off. It feels like your trying to cram as much information as possible in any way you can. While it's good (or rather, imperative) to have information about the setting, it's better to release it all gradually when the story actually needs it, rather than shoving it all in at the beginning of the story. Not only does it make for an unsatisfactory reading experience, but when the story progresses, I guarantee most people have forgotten what you wrote all clumped together ages ago. I don't know if you're familiar with Chekhov's gun? While it doesn't fully cover what I'm trying to say, it's close enough. I'll reiterate the fact that information is nice. I would rather read a book with too much info, than too little, but if I can I would read a book that introduces the world, characters and setting in general in a fun and interesting way. I've seen some forshadowing in there too, which I'm not gonna say anything on because it's a nice thing have in a story. You said in a comment that you've planned out volume 1 already, right? That's good, because that means you have a certain idea about where the story is headed. It also means you can look over your ideas and mess around with them, as well as plan out HOW you want to write your book too. I've read books before where the authors end up writing a completely different story than they originally planned. What I'm trying to say is play around with your ideas, and don't be afraid to experiment. If this book ends up like 'just another cliche book', I will still read it, but I know that it would be much more entertaining if you try and write something that warps the 'cliche guidelines' and puts a twist on the genre. Of course, the way you write your book is up to you. You said to comment if there were any suggestions and thoughts, and here we go. I figured putting all of my thoughts in one place would be better than scattering it in the comment section. I've never written anything myself, and I only have a year or two of reading (or rather, webnovel, manga and anime) experience, so I don't know whether my suggestions are good. I commend authors like you for putting in the time and effort to write. So, thanks, any I hope you continue writing this in the future. 🙂
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Very nice! Keep up the good work! I've never seen a game based story such as yours. Not sure if it's a bad thing or a very good one. Bomb potential if you ask me.