Unfortunate Hero's Retirement Life

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HotIce

Author here. I am here shamelessly to give my own work with 5* :) and explain a bit about the story. Our Mc is sealed for an unknown time, but when he woke up and broke the seal, he realized he was in a foreign land. Later, slowly but surely, our Mc will find out how he end up in this foreign land (Earth). He will slowly uncover the mysteries Earth experienced such as the catastrophe 600 years ago and so on. Please be patient with the slow start :) I hope you enjoy my second work or maybe third? Nevermind, hope you enjoy my story :)

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fhxt

Please proofread or get an editor. It's really hard to follow with all the grammar errors. This is like using machine translation ...........

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Brezer

Translation is pure terror. You can get the same thing with machine translation.......................................................... ........ .

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LV 14

Oto

Simply unreadable. I wanted to try this out, but it’s almost as if the author put a bunch high school-level words into a randomizer and spread them throughout his sentences in order to make his writing seem more chic. There are commas in the middle of a phrase, comma splices everywhere, run-on sentences, non-sensical sentences, etc... You name it, this author has it. It’s almost as if this novel was written for companies to use for their interview examinations for incoming editors. Let’s not even go over the chuunibyou plot and naming. You want to try this novel? Go ahead. But don’t say you weren’t warned.

LV 15

slaktarfisken

I only managed to read the first few paragraphs before giving up. The idea shows promise the execution, though, does unfortunately not live up to that promise. This story needs significant editing and spell-checking. Maybe that gets better further into the story, but I find the sentence building and grammatical errors to be too off-putting to continue reading.

LV 5

Nyxarias

so the dear trash Author deletet my post how about you delete the spam bots you have you pathatic peace of ****. So back to my previus revie you have here people that dont even read your novel and give it 5 stars i do the same but i give you 0 well 1 in this cease because i cant give 0 here you go

LV 11

NotYourCat

Well, decent story, I gave this story average of 3.8 * for this story... Well, I really like the concept and world-building of this story, the story is interesting and the characteristic of the character also strong, but here is the thing that bothers me and makes me less enjoy when reading this story 1. The author really wants the misunderstand troupe of MC is weak from bystander continue, we'll I know it is to drive the plot but continuing it for a long time is annoying. Moreover the build-up each time when people offend the MC isn’t get paid by the conclusion, aka, the conclusion is not really satisfying... 2. I know that the MC is a kind hero before, but how he reacts and doing something is really annoying, like what the purposes of hiding his identity when you literally always blurted out his identity as master... And the stupidity why he hides his strength... 3. Less screentime of MC’s slice of life, I mean I am interested in this story because the title and the synopsis also tag make me want to read about MC slice of life as retired OP HERO... But his slice of life time is so little here, also what got us hooked about this genre, like face slapping etc isn’t included here, just like I said above, the author introduced many xianxia’s cliche arrogant character here, but the conclusion after they offending the MC is not satisfying. <if this is counted as slice of life part of the story, well, this is getting more and more annoying... 4. Many more thing that makes me uncomfortable when reading this story, but I forgot, I’ll update it when I remember. My favorite part of this story 1. When MC’s become preschool’s teacher 2. How he interacts with children and coax them 3. Worldbuilding and mystery of how his first world and earth connected 4. Side character building is really good Suggestion from me: 1. You can’t just think about the plot, also thinking what you want us as readers to feel, take time to think of what you want the reader to feel in each arc, chapter, or even sentence. 2. Although the characters beside MC is interesting, MC is really annoying, so if it doesn’t change the main plot, please make him change his annoying character. 3. When there is character offend the MC, please make satisfying conclusion of it. 4. I have something in my mind but I don’t know how should I say it, lol. I’ll update the review when the time comes...

LV 15

Pyrozian

Grammar quality is to bad for me to really want to read it, no idea if it gets better. The idea behind it is good though.

LV 6

deikatsuo

Love. it. 감사합니다

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97Alex

Haven't read it yet, just the synopsis and your review, and it seems interesting, although i enjoyed your last work, the only problem that might be would be the grammar but it was readable so this should be too, so hey why the hell not 5 stars right ? 😂 Hope you'll write more, I'll start reading when it gets to 100 chaps or more, keep it up.

LV 14

tiredperson

I dont know if the story ever gets better but I read a few chapters and just couldn't do it. The grammar is absolutely atrocious. If an editor is ever added down the line maybe itll be good. In it's current form though it needs work.

LV 6

swordzero

Although the novel started out great and was really interesting, after a while it fell short. After about 30-35 chapter in the novel in started to feel bland and boring.

LV 11

Amatsu

I am sorry that i need to give such a low evaluation. I tried to read it, but my head srarted hurting while reading the first two chapter. I read novels for entertainment and to build a world in my mind while reading these stories. if i want to immerse myself into the story, it needs to have a basic level of grammar and story telling quality. I also read comments about this grammar problem and that it gets better with the chapter as the story develops. But i needed to stop reading, because my head could not take it. If possible could you please rewrite the beginning, so that it reflects the real quality of the world you build. I would really appreciate it and hope your stories get traction and your writing improves by leaps and bounds

LV 3

SLM_Salah

After I finished the novel, I can say it was fun. The world's background is good, and the power system is fairly good. The biggest problem with the novel is the stupidity of most characters. Characters with limited intelligence and stupid behavior. The author should work more in terms of writing characters. I think that's all I have.

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BigBangOrko

This is a very good novel which remains true to it's name till the very end. It has a slow beginning and remains slow and laid-back till the end, a slice of life novel to be exact. Don't expect too much action, it has a bit of drama, a bit of politics and a lot of fluff. Writing quality is average with a bit of grammatical errors in the beginning, characters are good and so is the world background. Yours Sincerely

LV 10

Rafftle

I write this to ask why. Why does webnovel locked the last 2 chapter behind the paywall? This story is completed so why do the reader have to pay for the privilege to read the last few chapter? This is simply atrocious.

LV 15

Master_of_Sleep

Good novel, with an interesting premise. The only problem is that the book is very hard to read for a lot of it due to terrible grammar. In one chapter there were only 9 paragraphs without any mistakes. If you can't slog through that, then don't read this book.