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!Warning! This story has a lot of 4th wall breaking and high levels of sassiness. Read at your own risk!
We all know the original tale of Cinderella. The stepfamily who harassed Cinderella for years, The Ball Cinderella went to, and the shoe she lost. The fairy godmother and of course the prince who she marries at the end.
Now, scratch all the beliefs you have about Cinderella and step into a new story. A story where Cinderella stands up for her beliefs, where the prince is no longer a brainless, nameless character and a fairy godmother who doesn't just give a dress and pretty shoes.
Meet a new and more realistic Cinderella...
- "Well, isn't this interesting?" The prince looked at Cinderella, who was crouching down behind the cabinet. "I wonder what a little mouse like you is doing here." He grinned and Cinderella's throat was as dry as a desert... -
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World Background: Unoriginal Character design: Interesting twist Stability of updates: Like me (aka slow, I'm sorry ahaha) Writing Quality: Certain points could be written better. To anyone who is thrown off by the first person view, note that the story does get better, and that the meta breaks are not as intense or as jarring as the story goes on. Suggestion: please make sure your novel is interesting without relying too much on tropes. Make it original! You are already relying on a world created by someone else. That's all, looking forward for more.
For a tale that most readers and writers alike have heard, this was presented in a different light— with an equally different style. Our author has decided to descend down those *censored*, crystal steps from heaven and participate in a... strange situation? Fairy Go— uhhh Boss, are you part of the mafia?... Ahem, other than the weird dialogue from earlier, this is my advice to you. I do recommend maybe cutting out some of the author and Cinderella’s conversations like the recap/ rewind since it does break off the flow of the story for me; however, I still do feel like it, to a certain degree, makes the story a unique case in itself. This is a decision you should think about as others such as myself may find this slightly weird. However, other than this, I find it a bemusing twist of a tale and hope you continue to keep up the hard work, Author !
A Superb Work 😊👍✨ The novel has a good plot and is promising. I love the pacing of the novel and the way writer writes the story. The writer is successful in appealing to the readers . At last the novel is overall nice and will desperately wait for the next chapters to release And hope that the writer will continue this awesome work and will evolve even more with time . My best wishes are always with you .[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Six chapters in and I do like how the setting was described. The ball's glamour was easy to picture with how you write it. The construction of the sentences were alright although there were a few grammatical errors here and there, a mistake everyone has and could be easily edited. How the story's being told is a bit interesting, though, as the MC talks to the narrator a lot. So I'm a bit confused if the narrator is also a character of the story? There are styles like that, as I've read some, but if it is for a novel I think you should have said so beforehand. If it is not really a part of it and you want the main character to throw side comments as she goes along with what she's experiencing, considering first person POV might work. So far, this is all that I've observed. I do hope you'll continue writing and developing your craft. Cheers to you!
The characters seem to be interesting and the story is a humorous one. However, I felt like the formatting could have been better and the grammar was off. If that gets patched up, then the story will be better. It is a good read all in all and an interesting topic.
I was hooked on the concept, it's new and exciting! I have read many Cinderella stories but this one stood out amongst the others. The book is in the first-person narrative, the mc is express full with the delivery of her thought processes. The storyline is very finely written and the characters are portrayed descriptively. Nice job author !
Nice style of narration, It was new for me and Of course I liked it ❤️. This story was like a behind-the-scenes or back story that was funny and touching. With the author and Cinderella bickering on the narration itself....hahaha
The plot idea is truly unique and the style of writing and the tone was captivating. It starts off slow introducing Cinderella's false story, then intrigue's the reader with direct address. Great talent, Keep it up Author!
This is a great humorous take on the Cinderella fairytale. I like how the author incorporates Cinderella into the narrator's telling of the tale, constantly interrupting, correcting or telling them to hurry up. It's funny to hear Cinderella act this way as she is traditionally such a bland, sweet and ass-kissing character. Great spin on things, makes the story far more interesting. Also loved how this story makes Cinderella's real mission at the palace to steal the king's crown. Well written, smooth prose, great humor. A great read!
Lovely cover page! Great, completely different from the stories here! Something new and fresh :) I had a good laugh. That's what writing is about - giving readers some joy. You have an original idea and I hope you will continue it :) Whish you an inspiration.
This was a comedic experience based on what I've read so far. I appreciate the fact that the story makes it clear to you that there will be comedy and there will be constant 4th wall breaking. Most of the humor is simple, but it still invokes a laughter or two, or even just a chuckle at most. Keep on writing author. Hope this novel becomes a success.
HEYYY! ALthough the story is a picked up plot from the classic tale, you have beautifully enhanced the character design. Cinderella has her own badass kick to her and i love how you've moulded the story so beautifully in your own way. With more detail like meeting the king, the conditions with the prince, the begining is a sweet melancholy and its sooo lovelyyy, 4.8!
Interesting story, nice twist on a classic fairy tale and a unique writing style. I have seen different Cinderella stories, so I was intrigued with this one. I enjoyed the funny side of it. Although, I would suggest to tone down on the reca**. It tends to break the flow of the story, just my opinion. Overall, I would say that it is pretty good.
Hmm, where should I start? Writing Quality: Is decent but your writing style has its own charm, grammars and punctuation are so-so, good job! Story development: well-paced I supposed. Updating stability: I recommend you to upload your chapters 3 times a week, I mean that is the average one here. World Background: Good (Honestly, I don't know what to say so a simple 'good' should do d trick)
Interesting! I really like how you write the 4th wall breaking moments, they are hilarious xD The story itself is very well written, bringing new light to the story that we have long known, in a very unique way. Good job, Author!
It really seems interesting. I like the characters......... I would love to read more chapters. I have read few chapters so far. keep it up.
The synopsis was interesting and the story was well written. The idea of a MC talking with the author is unique as well! Keep up the good work author!!!!!
At first, I didn't understand the storyline you made, but after reading to the end, I started to understand. Your writing is very unique. Some parts make me chuckle. However, it will be better if the characters are more developed. And, maybe for the use of punctuation can also be improved again. Keep it up!
Okay, let's get it straight, it is a very sassy representation of Cinderella. Yes, it breaks, the fourth wall but that's the fun point about it. I would give you this your synopsis, title & cover all would bring you, readers. As they are good. While your writing style may not be everyone's cup of tea but it is right by my alley... And I loved it. I loved the Sass and the twist plotted in the story. good job.
Hi there! I saw some other authors post a message this way, and thought: I can do that as well. I had some commonly asked questions about my novel, so here you go! 1. I update every Sunday and Wednesday. 2. My chapters are currently about 400-500 words long. Those will be longer! About 1000-1500 words each. I pre-write my chapters so please be patient! 3. My first language isn't English, but I still welcome any critic on grammar points! That was all. Please keep on reading, reviewing, and commenting. It really gives me more motivation to write better! Thanks!