Webnovel Author: Brian_Hanes_117 - Fanfic Collection

The story is well written. The updates seem to be steady, and it develops naturally. The cover is engrossing, and the intro is atypical. On the other hand, the writing format is a little odd. It seems every sentence is spaced out but I'm not really sure why that is. It would make sense if there were some sort of pattern, like spacing each quotation, however that is not the case from what I can tell. There are also moments there are proper paragraphs before going back to spacing one sentence at a time. Putting that aside, I'd like to see a bit more description. Description can be done in many ways. It can refer to specific narration that describes how characters, the environment, and other things look in the story. It can be narration that lays out what certain things smell or sound like (which isn't used as often but is pleasant to see every now-and-then). With that being said, I wish the author the best on their journey. This is an entertaining piece for whoever may be interested. Dear writer, I welcome you to check out my story "Avatar: The Vindicated Avenger". It is a spinoff of the fan expansion of the hit animated series Avatar: The Last Airbender, called "Avatar: Macai's Journey". I would love to know what you think of it. https://www.webnovel.com/book/avatar-the-vindicated-avenger_26486522605265405

Another thing I would add is to make sure that you are making an impact with relatable dialogue, drama, or humor as quickly as possible. This is an effective way to capture people's interest. Resonating with someone is particularly important at the start of a novel because that will decide how likely they are to keep reading it. How you close is also paramount but in a situation like this, the first few chapters should always be the priority.

This story has a catchy cover and title. The writing is flowery, poetic, and touching. The author clearly has a wide vocabulary. The description seems to hit most areas including visual and each sentence feels differently. I definitely think this is an awesome story. With that being said, the description goes overboard at times where it could be more efficient and straightforward. Remember, you as a writer want to reach as many readers as possible. Part of that is making sure your story is well-polished and edited. Part of that is thinking outside of the box when explaining things as you did. Another aspect of that is not going over-the-top to explain every single detail, as many people are not that interested in every detail; try to strike a balance. I wish the best to the creator on her/his future projects. To the author, I welcome you to check out my story "Avatar: The Vindicated Avenger". It is a spinoff of the fan expansion of the hit animated series Avatar: The Last Airbender, called "Avatar: Macai's Journey". I would love to know what you think of it. https://www.webnovel.com/book/avatar-the-vindicated-avenger_26486522605265405