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Because of his concealment, even God didn't sensed him and he died being left on the Void of Waiting souls. After hearing about it, he received 3 wishes but each of them has side effects.
Vern, the concealed conqueror. Come with him on his merciless missions and heaven defying and cheating powers
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First verse: DanMachi
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Good idea but way to fuckin fast. The author needs to take it down 89 notches for a good story, but considering most people have common sense I'm gonna assume this is just for fun and you want a fast story. Not for everyone as there is very little development but hay enjoy and read if you want, just here to put my opinion. (Don't let me personal opinion affect how you look at the fan-fic.)
Oof, that some pile of.... Anyway. There problems in all aspects. Grammar - berely readable. Characters and they representation - are you even watch original danmachi or read ln? At least look on wiki. Hestia is last person that could complain about shut-ins, heck, think for a second, she is goddess of home and family. Ais is just, woah, I don't even know, but that just isn't even close. Mc is inconsistent at best, degenerate sometimes complet beta, sometimes trying to be smart but come as cringe.... Ugh. Freya, I don't know, I get the drift you try to portray her as actually good person.... Yeah good luck with that, cuck - lord. Story itself lack in details, severely, sometimes desparity between two lines so great, that makes me confused. I try to find what happened, but nah, it's just pacing, and lack of context without thoughts and actions from others characters..... It's looks like some old games, when one level is sandy beach and other is sewage, without even some sort of connection between them, and level just ends after two jumps.... Wtf?! Conclusion: what I even read?!
Good idea, release more chapter ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
Writing quality? It's questionable! Stability of update? Well, I am new here so I don't really know it. Story development? It's rushed! Character design? Almost all characters from Danmachi didn't behave like themselves. Example: - Ais that didn't retaliate to the MC pressure in her familia mansion. - How Loki easily agree and bet her familia member in a fight. World building? Well, there is none. Note: This is what I get after reading 7 or 8 chapter that has 'edited' in the title but I felt something still wrong like 'easily killed it by killing' and many more.
plot holes everywhere .plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere .plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere .plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere plot holes everywhere
A little bit too fast some characters are not their actual personality the system is almost non existant ex: (missions are too few) on the slave ticket you made her forget her past (makes me feel that raphtalia is not raphtalia makes me feel like she is just an empty shell) Stats not explained feels like random numbers On the bright side I like That esdeath will be his future lover (probably)
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i didnt get past a couple chapters i tried to give it a chance but the story is too fast pase mc is already power full by ch 2 the interactions between charicters are short and uninteresting. fight scene i saw wasent a fight scene his first battle lasted a few sentences as just he killed this guy with this ability no info on how he trained to use it just automatically able to no explanations or anything. you can read it if your bored but not a keeper novel for me it felt like i could drop at any time.
Progressing too fast needs more work on the story and details to short on the chapters and way to fast
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the story developes to fast you don't understand what happend like he is in the old chutch and then suddenly his in the restaurant eating like what happened it's like he teleporteed.When he came to the world how did he come from haven when he was in the void haven and void are 2 diffrent worlds/places.And when he came down he became the familiar of hestia too fast like in 2 words like "become my familia" "ok" like wtf ? and then again he in restaurant and the next moment he is in the dungeon fighting monsters what happend in between ?
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It's good overall. It makes me wanna see the ending balance hope you don't drop it midway. I think you should also change the title. Heck, he isn't even concealed or using concealment and here I thought he will have a power like in the novel Everyone is a Returnee but overall good job.
Gramar bring me headache and how he made ais fallen love?. now my head is hurt and my mood gone bad *sigh* but well maybe some people will think this story is good one? other might think if this fic good but I'm not.
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the story has a good premise but the writing is so lazy that it's kind of sad a lot of plot holes in the story bad character development and a major time skip that that we need to know what happened.
Fucking weak MC for me .........and self righteous MC there we got.........lame and hideous mind concept author there ...yeah yeah yeah..for me this is really hideous novel
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good way to have Ais, and it is also good that you change the world, because being in danmachi does not give benefits. ------------------------ Consider the world of "-strike the blood' "-.