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Liam Smith dies after a pitiful existence on earth and transmigrates into the dying body of a Wizard in the Harry Potter Universe.
He is granted a simple system that has the potential to make him one of the strongest Wizards but the path he has to take is not an easy one.
Join him as he starts at the very bottom, rejected from every side, and makes his way to the pinnacle of the Wizarding world
*** The setting of this fic is post-cannon, starting off right after the end of Harry Potter and The Deathly Hallows, (excluding the epilogue) ***
*** The System previously contained an OOC Feature which has been edited out. Please point out any inconsistencies that you might see. ***
*** Chapter 1 - 59 is the foundation arc. Character development begins from chapter 60. ***
*** This fanfiction is being published on Webnovel, Scr*bbleH*b, and R*yalR*ad by me. ***
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Thank you for giving my book a chance. ♡ This is my first fanfic so please be kind. Your opinions are always welcome and I might not be able to reply to every of your comments but I see them and I try my best to listen to the readers' suggestions. I also want to mention that a lot of people seem to think this is a slave system. I mentioned in the synopsis that there will be an OOC Feature and it'll be removed by the 15th chapter so I'll have to ask that you at least read till that point before judging or rating the book. I'm working very hard with each chapter and I hope to improve on my overall writing and the plot of the book as well.
a second review to clarify recent changes. the OOC Feature has been edited out of the book so please don't hesitate to point out any inaccuracies. as a result of the OOC Feature not being a part of the book anymore, reviews about it will be deleted because it doesn't reflect the book any longer. Chapter 1-60 is the foundation arc and afterwards, the mc undergoes a rather dark character development as he works his way to becoming a powerful Wizard known as 'The Slytherin Magus'
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It is really bad. First chapters and premise were SO promising. But couldn't read it after 15th chapter. I mean it's so bland and tasteless that I just.... ugh. Man, he transmigrated into his favorite book show SOME emotions it's basics for POV stories It's stubbornly shown on his Status Window that he has charm and DA knowledge when he has none. MC doesn't even TRY to learn something about his bodies history and he is so PASSIVE it can drive you insane. I mean I understand that Author tries to slowly unreveal his story but its... bad. What's hurt me even more it's that it's clear that Author put some effort and as I said plot and premise are mwah🤌🏼. But unfortunately .... 2.2
To be honest it's a genuinely disappointing novel, the quality of writing is beautiful, the grammar on point, everything makes sense which is sad to say but it's a standard most stories on this site don't reach and I would very much like to enjoy this story but I can't, the main characters personality seems all over the place and his system is quite literally and pointless burden, it only distracted for the overall story and kept the MC from actually being a interesting character.
The OC characters are well put together. The pacing of the story is also adequate. It's just the story is not able to generate neither the interest nor the emotional connection needed to continue with the story.
Contrary to most of the reviews here, I actually liked the System taxing him for going OOC. It would have been more interesting to see how the MC works around the limitations the system placed on him. But then a few chapters in, the penalty for going OOC gets removed with a single cheap purchase. If this was the case why have the penalty system in the first place? After the OOC penalties were removed, the novel turned into a generic HP fanfic, except its extremely boring. Things are happening, the MC does stuff, but they are all disjointed. There are certain relationships and interactions here and there but there doesn't seem to be any purpose, consequence, or even development from having them. The MC is extremely robotic in that sense. There are upgrades and powerups provided by the system, but they don't do anything (there is no impact or influence of getting them in the story). Maybe they will happen later down the road, but if that was the case then the purchases of the power ups could be spaced out or made more expensive. Writing quality, stability of updates get full points, but the rest of the parameters leave much room for improvement.
I like the wotld background. But aside from that its pretty meh. Just read another story. There are plenty of great to decent ones out there
I enjoyed reading the first three chapters of the book. An ff with great potential, please continue this, waiting for more. Beautifully written and a well-thought, unique start. Good luck author :))
Okay, now I can drop a more detailed review after being reading to the updated chapter. The first arc was kind of slow but very essential and important because it set up the foundation for the second arc. Trust me, by slow, I don't mean less enjoyable because I have been hooked for quite sometime but I had to drop this after the second arc began because I did not expect that! I won't spoil, don't worry but this is definitely worth the read.
30 chapters in. The fanfic looks solid. If anything just the fact that MC transmigrates in HP after the cannon storyline ends is enough to make it better than your average HP fanfic in which MCs are just side characters that baby sit the golden trio without making any impact on the story. For the time being it's short though. And there are low star reviews from when the story was even shorter. Those can be ignored.
Thank you for this great piece As for its review I will say it is unique in its own right Keep it up👍👍👍👍 And please don't drop after few chapter
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Great job so far, it is pretty obvious that Author isn't just randomly writing a HP fanfic but proper thought and research is a huge part of writing this book. The use of grammar is also quite good and I must commend the Author on that. Great job.
story flows fluidly not only that but everything is though over. You can easily see authors originality(even if it is a fan-fic). so basicly 5 stars out of 5
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A story that seems to be something that could really stand out from the generic HP fanfiction on this site. Although it's in the starting, the writing is pretty good and the story don't seem to be genetic. I like the background of MC before getting transmigrated. Gives the story of an edge as not a lot of novels have it. Let's hope the author do justice to the initial chaps and give a great novel.