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Chaos' Heir
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A recurring nightmare afflicted Khan's nights since the Second Impact. His dreams replayed the scenes of the crash of the Nak's spaceship, an alien race that the humans had defeated five hundred years ago.
Khan's life had turned upside-down after the tragedy. His mother had died during the incident, and the Nak's toxic mana had infected him. His father had managed to save him, but they ended up losing their home and name in the process.
The nightmares wouldn't let Khan forget about the Nak, so he decided to join the Global Army and learn to wield mana. He had to put an end to those dreams, even if that meant hunting down that alien race through the stars.
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Preliminary 5 star review as I am a big fan of his other work Birth of the Demonic Sword. Will update review at 50+ chap . . . . . . . . . ..
Disclaimer: I have enjoyed this story and like the premise but this is a complaining review. I still highly recommend giving this a try. These are just the problems I think exist and they haven't stopped me from continuing to read this. As I read this I come across a few critiques/personal opinions. 1. The human race is said to be spaceworthy and traveling to other planets, conquering or making alliances with other races. Yet throughout the story the scale never really feels like that is the case. It consistently feels like the only people in existence are the characters introduced 'on screen'. Ex. He is on a world where the race is said to have been in control of the entire planet and yet I never felt like there were more than a few dozen people living there. Most of the story takes place in training camps that barely seem to have any people. 2. His relationship with the alien woman, Liiza, has come to dominate at least half of the story and is tiring at this point to read about. It was interesting at first but now it is just repetitive. The story stopped being about the MC getting stronger and traveling the universe to find his enemy and now it's all about how he will do anything for his relationship. The relationship that multiple times in the story has been said to be 'toxic'. 3. I've noticed this in many stories. When an author wants to make his MC seem smarter or better they will make their superiors dumber or incompetent to lend credence to the MC. This happens here with the MC's military command. Someone in command should not be so flustered or easily persuaded by a teenage boy. Even if the said teenage boy has 'magical alien trauma' giving him OP powers and plot armor.
Omg a new novel from him i haven t even read a chapter and i still know its gonna be a great novel. well points it is i guess ..............
A better novel than most on this site but still gravely lacking: 1) Story proceeds at a snail pace, there are so many filler chapters (with the main character reaching the first level of cultivation at chapter 190) 2) The main character becomes progressively unlikeable (starts betraying his own race because he loves an alien girl) 3) Half the chapters are romance, I did not come here to read a romance story. 4) Cultivation levels are clear but applications of mana are confusing, there is new entire systems of utilisation getting thrown to the reader at random with massive info dumps and repetitions. Grammar is good but the story is so slow I can't recommend this to anyone. From chapter 100 to 200 there has barely been any development.
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From my expierence on this website I have read many of good books. But honestly none of them even come close to the quality that is shown from this one. I cant help but feel refreshed when reading this book, not because I enjoy the main characters pain but because his pain is actually relatable. He doesnt only get physically hurt like most main characters but he also gets mentally hurt. His struggles are not only large monsters that want to smash him to a pulp but also his struggle to understand himself and what he feels during his journey. Never have I read such a good book on this website and I honestly doubt anything will come close for quite awhile. Bravo and keep up the great work Mr. Author.
I really liked the story, but the story took a weird forced turn in order to separate Khan and Liiza. I feel that he should have stayed loyal, and it would have been better to have them both stay loyal. Then they would revisit their relationship in the future. Instead he moves onto women very quickly and it destroys what I thought of the story. Up until then I really enjoyed the story and it became one of my favorites, of the stories I am currently reading. However, I have now dropped it due to what I feel to be forced actions and bad character/story progression.
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Review by chapter 269 I binged the story in the past few days. I decided to take a break before continuing the journey. I wish to write honest feedback before any recollection gets muddled. I am a very picky reader so I may be biased. I will go through my thoughts relative to other works expected from webnovel. The author is passionate in what he does. He pushed himself everyday and relys on the readers for motivation. It is evident in his recent work that kept me reading unlike his previous work. For reasons I can't recall, I couldn't get past it's single digits. I'll be following his projects in the future the will surely be better. Anyways, let get back to the subject. The story is nothing special. A work one who enjoys the classic solo edgy beat em up would enjoy. There are certain aspects that makes it preferable compared to the rest. There is no mention of systems and 'skills/magics' are not explored anatomically. This allows for more focus on the story that many novels fail to understand. Characters are explored in more detail, monologues are more prevalent, everything one expects from a webnovel is there and more. But that's where it ends. The core of the story is set in flaws just like every other novel. The Mc has a questionable incentive, the world is nothing special/ doubtful perhaps and most character have a pretense of third dimensionality Going into slight detail, the Mc's motivation mostly arises from a reoccurring nightmare. Personal ideologies push the Mc in pursuit of power. I prefer them to be more tangible/physical. It gives more substance to motivation compared to a drive derived from an unrealistic unbreakable will. The Mc is perceived with a lot of flaws, the core of what makes characters alive. When the flaws are put to the test however, they never falter. It annoys me when it occurs in the story. Show me some weakness, sacrifice the mc's objective success and potential, loss friends, family because of these weaknesses. These weaknesses are bottled up and rationally explored for growth instead of exploding unfavorably for a more organic story. The Mc is a Mary Sue when it matters. The world revolves around the Mc. No single action from characters can alter the perceived story like the Mc. For this reason and many minor others, characters don't feel alive and relevant even though some are explored in detail. Any given character has to be written like a Mc. That is what makes the world vivid and lively. Perhaps George is a fair character but the author Insistance on the Mc's solo action doesn't give him a chance to shine. The Mc meets love interests at the beginning of each planet. The Mc relys on them for growth. I like reliance but they don't necessarily need to be love interests. It gets tiring. For reasons mentioned above, the world inst exciting beyond the expected big bad needs to die. One example, the juxtaposition of Mcs enrollment in a military and his continued defiance of orders and relished freedom bothers me. Whether the military has reasons for them or not, it goes against the perceived realism associated to these associations. Many more occur in the story making it wacky. It's a good read. Nothing exciting I would say.
EveofChaos is proving that he is a writing machine. Writing two book, totalling 5chapters a day between the two, is outstanding. Well done Eve! Keep it up. Chaos’Heir is a scifi with more fictional elements at the moment. Character development is going smoothly and tension is building in the story. If you are looking for a new book to read I recommend picking up this one. Don’t mind the cliffhangers, they just build your addiction.
A million girlfriends, new one every 3-6 months - Its the most annoying thing in this novel, ruining story for me. Does mc have nothing better to do? His loyalty is non existent, its a miracle he is still loyal to humanity and not a retard traitor like mc in Avatar or smth.
I have been immersed in the world of novels for over 10 years, none of them has managed to evoke so much emotion in me as Chaos' Heir. Binged this masterpiece in 2 days. The relationship between Khan and Liiza is portrayed in an incredible and progressive manner, I find myself rooting for the couple and am sincerely hoping that they can overcome whatever the future throws at them. The emotion expressed by the couple is incredibly intense and I cannot use words to express how anxious certain events that affect them make me feel. Characters such as George are also built incredibly well, with good qualities and flaws. Congratulations for this amazing story!
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Spoilers Through Chapter 219 I will start this review by saying most people who like these kinds of stories will love this book. It has a well written romance aspect which I found suprising. It has some great world building: not the best I have seen, but very good. Here are the things I found hard to ignore. I think the side characters and villains need more developement in terms of their backstory and motivation. Most characters besides the main ones don’t have any drive from what I can tell (as in, they have no goals), which makes their characters seem very two dimensional. Martha, Luke, etc. all serve a purpose, but we don’t really know anything about the characters themselves: their hopes and dreams, what they want to do through talks with the main character. The author will have moments telling us that Martha and Khan talk about personal things, but I want the author to show us these personal things they talk about. I believe it would enhance the story even further. Despite this, however, the usage of side characters throughout the story I think makes up for the lack of side character and villain motivation. I will say though, that if the author were to include more interesting backstory than just, (spoiler) for example, Illman’s main purpose when he gets introduced is as Khans romantic rival for Liiza, then I would be more excited to read more and more. My biggest gripe with this novel, however, is the author’s constant use of the phrase “the latter”. Instead of using the person’s name or some other descriptor, the author over uses this phrase and it makes it very hard for me to keep reading, especially when it is used upwards of 5 times a chapter. It seems most prevalent in the chapters containing fights. It makes the writing seem repetitive and boring, and it always brings me out of the scene instead of enhancing it. It needs to be used much, much less. Another problem I have is with the romance. I think the developement of the romance between Khan and Liiza was great and it fealt organic, but there were many aspects I found unrealistic. Why would no one question or try to follow Khan when he would leave to be with Liiza? Wouldn’t Kelly be concerned and try to follow him? I find it unrealistic that Khan and Liiza could get away with a relationship for that long without anyone becoming suspicious enough to at least try and follow him. And sure, you might say there was Illman, but I don’t think anyone would see him as much more than a slight bump rather than actual romantic contest. I like that Illman came to his senses, but I think it should have been drawb out longer to threaten the relathionship with Liiza more. It would add wayyy more tension, and add to the story too. There were a lot of small things like this that I feel the author didn’t capitalize enough on because they wanted Liiza and Khan to end up together without any resistance, but it meant there wasn’t any tension at all, so it left me disappointed. Overall, I think this author is very good, but they definitely have a lot they could improve on that would take their story to another level.
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Starts interesting enough with the first 100 or so chapters being the story of a young boy that goes to a military academy and is on his way to becoming a soldier. Then makes an abrupt turn and spends the next 100 or so chapters focusing on passionate young love that prevails against all challenges. They know each-other only two weeks before their love reaches an unshakeable level, more passionate, true and free and hones than any love that's ever loved. Oh, and the MC is a martial genius, prodigy and the one to always save the day with everyone else just a pale shadow of his magnificence. Well, its not quite as bad as that but you get the idea. Most annoying is how the story turned from being a soft military fantasy to being a romantic fantasy. Its not badly written, but its also not what I started reading.
Amazing first 150 chapters, strong next 75 too. All starts to go downhill after leaving Nitis though in my opinion. Despite the obvious need for Liiza and Khan to split (she was taking up way too much of the plot), the author's justification is pretty poor. The random flings and romances thereafter only serve to give 'proof' to the readers that moving in from Liiza was the right decision. Overall very strong novel, but the poor romance developments have really disappointed me. If you can beat with that you'll thoroughly enjoy it though.
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It's a great novel to read. It's always satisfying to see a successful writer on WebNovel continue making original, high quality stories for us to enjoy. The vibe of Chaos Heir is (so far) different to Demonic Sword. However there are similar themes. Star reading, you won't regret it.
started for the action, quit from the sudden romance that started enveloping the story
what can i say other than that after 195 chapters this has become my all time fav story of the last 5 years. For sure my fav on webnovel. Its just so good . it hits all the right spots for me. I love the world the intrigue the Characters are SOOO GOOD i love it . Boy does the mc and the current main girl have the best relationship chemestry ( if some happens to this pairing ima be upset for real). What else other than im here for more ur doing amazing . ❤
One of the rare action packed novel which has a well done smooth romance. Even without romance, the novel would be definetly one of the best. The mana system is pretty interesting and several thing are yet to be revealed. The emotions the people feel before going to the battlefield feel real as though you are going there yourselves without compromising the negative aspect of being in the army. The author does a superb job with Emotions. The thing i hope the author continues focusing on is the mc personality and so far he's done it wonderfully. Definetly recommended. .... a bit of spoiler(opinion based) i hope the author does not go normal route of killing liiza(saying this because my poor heart wont be able to handle the shock😭 and i am genuinely curious if they dont seperate or she is trapped or some misfortune befalls to her and is used as a motivator for khan)
My man. This story is exceptional. Not too much going on in terms of abilities and such like BOTDS but thats what makes it great, lots of world development, and the character is absolutely perfect. Its not grandiose ya know. Amazing twist on mana and how it works, not used as an ultimate power but as tools instead which gives it power yet not sole reliability. Well rounded book all together.
Hello, author here. Thank you for having given my second novel a chance. I plan to update two chapters every day. Moreover, I always read the comments, so I will fix every error that you point out in less than a day. Anyway, I hope you enjoy the story.