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Fate; Unlasting

Fantasy 98 Chapters 92.3K Views
Author: DonDenis

4.8 (17 ratings)

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***book is to be scrapped and redone with new ideas. Please read my other better works. Thanks.***

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    nishidurani

    I like the way the scene was described as if I can see it clearly. It was so well written that I can't wait for more to be uploaded.. The story is full or mystery and magic. Good work author

    3yr
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    SKRZ
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    I like how descriptive the story is. You could literally see what the author was trying to say. In the first chapter for instance, I really liked the tension build up and the events that played afterwards - it was very magical - and I liked how it was written by the author. But like the synopsis said, it is a brutal world. It's sad. I really liked how the author conveyed the character's emotions as well. It has a good story line - pretty unique for me. But again, it's a brutal world to live in - and that's what the story's setting is, and i say the author has written a compelling storyline with this setting. The only other thing that I'd like to mention is the sentence structure. I just noticed a couple that the author can fix, but that did not affect the story negatively at all. Other than that, overall, the story is engaging and is a good read! Great job!

    3yr
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    yu_chan_desu

    wonderful read! the scenes are vividly described with details. some minor edits with run-on sentences. the paragraphs could be broken down to two as per my preference but all in all a great read! makes you wonder why the baby's really important 🤔

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    3yr
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    Protagonist_M

    Exciting stuff. Good attention to detail with the scene setting. I've always had a soft spot for gritty fantasy settings, haha. I'll add this to my library for now, hope to see more.

    3yr
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    WhiteVest

    It's a great book so far, really love that mother. The sacrifice she made without hesitation gave me chills. I'll be sure to keep reading. [img=fp]

    2yr
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    Nekonigiri001

    oh my, some chapters are so gory i hope i wont have nightmares lol its not that its bad kind of gory but the author has written and described it so well, i could picture it every scene. the story itself is interesting enough to hook readers and im at the point wondering who is the MC considering many are killed. watch out people, here comes the next George Martin who constantly kills our favourite character. hehe Dont take it as if im complaining because im not. all the scene im sure is needed. thank you author and may the spirity spirit guide you to success ☺

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    3yr
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    kpthe1
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    The epilogues are the crucial foundation to this book. The way the author tried to explain the world background is very detailed, and this has helped for the development of the further story. I can't seem to take my focus away from the book, the plot is too intriguing and the characters are awesome!!!! Great Work!!!

    3yr
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    Jo_J
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    An interesting story. From the very beginning, you try to transfer the reader to the world you have created. I am not really in the fantasy genre, but I couldn't stop reading. Your characters are expressive and you are great at building tension and the plot is addictive; that's what writing books are all about - keep the reader's attention! You're doing great! Good luck with the contest!

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    catvi
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    There is mindless Gary Stu action fantasy on qidian. Then there are books like these which have actual world building, mystery, and overarching plot. The Protags of this novel isn't just doing what they do to get to a higher power level. They do things not for themselves, but for the ultimate good. I like it.

    3yr
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    ranmaro
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    I loved the way author explained and described everything. It's like seeing it on the screen or TV. Highly recommended and added to my library. Wait for another thorough review when I'm finished reading it. Good work author :)

    2yr
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    LeeMaRi1999

    The author did a great job in how the words were used in the magnificent world he created! Good job! It was definitely a fantastic read overall!

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    3yr
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    HelenBold

    This book has well-described scenes with lots of magic, mystery, and action. The world-building is excellent and exciting, making the story more immersive. The plot develops in a very intense way, making it hard to leave the book aside. Overall, five stars!

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    Sun23
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    Starting off the writing quality is good, the only issue I found is that the author use commas a bit too much ( I also have the same problem) I think in paragraphs where there are more than five to six commas. The author can break these up into two separate sentences. One thing that I want to say, which is not a writing problems is that the chapters are wordy. I know that the author wants express and describe each setting and characters well, but for some reader it's a bit harsh on the eyes. Especially, if you are reading on a laptop or computer. The space between sentences and paragraphs are not as space out as I, a reader and author would like. Technically, it's not the author fault, but webnovel. For story development, I think the story is going at a steady pace. Not to fast or to slow. I especially like the prologues, it was very interesting. And the first questions that pop out of mind head when I finish reading the prologues, is wonder where the child and key are. But the author kept it pretty tight, not revealing all at once of their location and what happens to the them. As for the world background, I think is was clear that it's a world of magic. At first I thought is was a medieval world with magic, but the more I read it's was starting to sound modernish. It may have been due to the prologues. And in the prologues, incantation magic was introduce, then time travel. however further on in the chapters there wasn't magic much shown. I think the author is slowly introducing it to the readers, especially through the main character, who at this stage doesn't know who she is. Or as the author stated in her 'note' there might be more than one lead. In overall, I appreciate the author 'info' page which give answer to a few question regarding the story background. But I assume it probably left many reader with more questions than answer. As for Character design, I think the author describe well enough for me to be able to visual them. But I think the amount of characters the author introduce so far is a lot. At some point is was kind of hard to keep up which characters is which. I think if the author made a page note detailing the different characters in the story. It would be very helpful. And last but not least, updates. The author didn't say or have a schedule written, so I'm not sure, but to give a four star since I saw that the latest chapter is no more than three day go, compare to the release of the last previous chapters. So hoping the author is planning to release a new chapter within this week or maybe next. And as a last words of encouragement for the author: You are doing great! keep up the good work!

    2yr
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    MoYun_ZJ

    Vivid descriptions and tight pacing. The world here seems wide and complex, but new characters and scenes are introduced efficiently, with minimal confusion. An engaging read.

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    kuhaku_sora

    There is a nice feeling to this chapter! I cannot wait to see where does this novel goes with its vast world and character developments! And for the babyyy girl, please be saaafe You lots (including me) should read this story!

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    3yr
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    BlindBandit

    I love how you did the concept of the novel, it's very interesting. I've read through the first few chapters and I must say I got really intrigued the whole time, kudos to you author! good luck on your writng journey!

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    Annran

    The story is just...what to say...I don't have words even to express it. OMG! It's just so so soooo good....that everyone really should read it. Wonderful plot and characters development. Keep going Author. [img=recommend][img=recommend]

    1yr
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