Chapter comments on the chapter Tax collection (Part 2) of the book Chronicles of the Weakest Wind Mage

As ur number one fan (self proclaimed) I have a few suggestions (I also happen to be a writer) I was looking forward to the chapter to see how tyrannical the tax collection would be but in the end it was mostly just explained that it was harsh rather than actually showing how cruel it could have been... Also if Dega was prepared for days then why wouldn't he be sure to assemble all his men... Doesn't add up

No! Not Colson! He's the most innocent one out of all of them! 😢😭

Author, you don't have any POV for a meaningful commoner character suffering the tyranny (directly, not a sob story from the past), now you have them undermining the MC's effort, as well as characterizing them as being greedy and stupid. As a result, the readers feel no sympathy towards them at all, therefore rendering the MC's motivation of improving her territory moot. This is not good. I don't know if you read RtW, but this is how the author over there helps you understand how terrible the Rats' conducts are: he introuced a witch, which has a Rat as friend. Since the readers are interested in new witch, which is related to the MC's effort, they feel the way the Rat was introduced as natural. Then the author had the Rat and his friends (for emotional boost) suffer from higher-level Rats unreasonable conducts. That's how you make the readers understand that not all Rats are bad, some Rats are forced into the circumtance; Rat bosses are tyrants that need to be eradicated. I don't feel ANY sympathy for that old couple that got their money stolen.

and the way you describe the soldiers as "all are tyrannical for the sake of being fun, no one is forced to do it, the only different one is different because he is too stupid" is not good. You have fallen into the trap of having 1-dimensional antagonists, usually seen in face-slapping novels. Not a lot of people are horrible for the sake of fun and be bad. There are different people in every type of circumtance. As a result, I don't have an impression of the soldiers as real people, but only cardboard cutouts for the MC to kick. The older brother too, being a horrible human "because he is raised that way". You are setting the older brother up only as a face-slapping target, aren't you? That's fine and all, but please get more into his mind and the way he thinks after that. Make the antagonists human. I really don't want this novel to turn into another face-slapping wish-fulfillment read. I think we have enough of them here.

Well nothing goes acording to the plan

Rest in pee Colson (´;ㅿ;｀)

So it’s been a while...did something happen?

So they had forewarning and an option to minimize losses. Instead they all decided to aggravate the situation all the while knowing they don't have yet the actual strength to resist. What I like this story, the start was really promising. But uhh..beside the mc, the motivation and reaction of the people to the world they live in doesn't feel like they mesh together well recently.

Meanwhile... The boy in first chapter is forgotten lol

Poor Colson. He is the only one going to be punished and he didn't even know what is he supposed to do. T . T

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Loved it! Seems forewarning made everything worse

I thought this tax collection would be mind opening for Colson. Yeah it did! But it was rather weak. Whats up with this mack guy? it seems to me that mack would get faced slapped later and the other npc soldiers would be too scared to move..

Haha.... next : Dega vs Colson. Mia : "oh no. Who should I choose between my 'harem' member?" Lol

15 minutes!? I thought the count didn't pick on his direct neighbors. Oof. . . How did she forget to tell Dega about Colson? I'd been assuming that was just an unmentioned part of their preparations up till now. I wonder how many allies Mia'll lose today. @Mia: Everything's gone wrong because you had optimism. . . Dug your own grave really.

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it's quite satisfying when someone who always look up upon the clouds is smacked back to the ground to see the reality

Ghøst wasn't here

i'm rereading this because the author just announced that new chapters are forthcoming... No spoilers, but as a service to new readers, this author is good enough that second-guessing rarely pays off. Just have faith and see where the story goes ;)

Nooo you got the wrong one😭