Our lad John, slapping that ass as a plant. Good job John, you do alpha MC's proud. On another note, she must be incredibly pretty to have even lustful women chasing after her, in my mind, these lustful women probably aren't even into girls usually, I like to think this so I can get a better understanding of just how pretty this lass is, just so it increases the satisfaction of reading about John hitting that behind. I need to stop.
As i can see from the experience so far , author - san , your story is amazing , and captiviting. Hovever , I can also see that your grammar and punctuation is improving , slowly but steadily. I recommend the book " high school grammar by wren and martin" to you ,to read. It will help you in your endeavors.
Unedited indeed.
You have two serious grammar problems: words that consists of two words and the forms of "it".
"land mark" -> "landmark"
"in side" -> "inside"
"a go" -> "ago"
"With out" -> "Without"
"sometime" -> "some time"
"it's" -> "its"
"it's self" -> "itself"
"site" -> "sight"
"it's" -> "its"
"near by grass lands" -> "nearby grasslands"
(I don't garantee that my correction is 100% correct.)
Spoopy