Reviews of A Walk Through The Eternity by Lazy_Cat_Kush - Webnovel

There's a lot of imagination poured into this novel. The author uses some cliches (like the reincarnation of a scientist equipped with a bionic chip, the auction house event, the prince protagonist, etc.) but it's well done, and it's evident that the plot has been carefully delineated. Story development, character design and world background are amazing, I couldn't find flaws in these aspects. The writing needs urgently proofreading. U.U

This review is part of a review swap and valid as of chapter 17. I'd classifly this as Science Fantasy with a splash of litrpg, but at chapter 17 it's not entirely certain that the world is a fantasy one? That didn't make any sense, did it? OK. The story starts in the far future with the enemy of all humankind taking his final leave of his grandfather. Then enemy number one does some strange stuff and the story timeskips some three hundred years. We're told that he's indeed the enemy of all humankind by means of a trial where he's sentenced to live horribly. Next we have a few scenes of prison life and the obvious escape attempt. The fatally failed attempt, followed by reincarnation. An entirely different story follows the enemy number one from his rebirth through his early childhood in what might or might not be fantasyland. At chapter 17 the story has barely begun. We're given the first mystery that's likely to lead up to the first adventure a little further into the story. While a very interesting concept the story suffers from a number of extremely confusing time-jumps both backwards and forward in time. So for the stars. Writing: Three stars. While the narrative layout is pretty good the English language used is a mess. So this is an average of a four star textual disposition and a two star English. The story mixes past and present tense without any warning at all, but this type of error is already in the domain of a three star review. Updates: Five stars. Not updated every day, but definitely a stable release schedule. Story: Four stars. I'm yanking that fifth star because of the time jumps. Not because time jumps automatically are bad, but because I just can't understand in what way they add to the story. Apart from that we're having a perfectly functioning development of events. Character: Five stars. Why write about a hero when you can write about the enemy of all humankind? I like the idea. World: Five stars. It's always present. Sometimes by means of huge chunks of infodumping, but that complaint belongs to the writing departement and doesn't detract from the fact that the world is very much a part of the story. I don't do litrpg in any form, but for those of you who like to read that kind of stories this seems to be a very promising start provided the author gets access to someone who can do a line-edit.