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CaptainKevi
At first I thought the MC got Reincarnated with the powers or looks of todoroki shouka but I was wrong. The story is great and the MC is strong so it's not bad.
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Amamyth
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Zeke_Ackerman
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Brayon101
Hello check out Peerless Martial God *_*
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Hello check out Peerless Martial God *_*
Share the love and keep on reading π
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Djabilong
It's fine for the most part. But then you get to the weirdest caviats that make zero sense:
- Quest with a three year timer and 27 prisoners in the lab - so let's wait for 2,9 years to solo it and let 25 potential future powerhouse recruits die just because I want to solo it to get +5% more rewards (while having a servant that can steamroll the entire base herself from the moment the quest was issued).
- Who will win - a protag with plot armor, system, hybrid bloodline of two most powerful gods, sharingan, blessings, innate mastery cheats, <...> OR a little girl who spent most of her life in a coma and casually trained for a year after waking up. I bloody dare you to guess who won that fight.
And the list of weirdness goes on.
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niil
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AugustCarlo
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Culture_Lover
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immarypoppinyall
Mc to weak for **** sake nurfed much?ben traning for many years but he got defeat hes even a dragon wtf? He can only be strong as a dragon form and not his real body yeah men nice thinking to disappoint ed in this novel
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Webowobo
Just to get this out of the way, the title is misleading. The system the MC has isnβt really a βFate Systemβ as it sells and gives things to the user from completely other serieses with completely different power levels. During the beginning yes it could be considered so, but a couple chapters in it starts to get blurred with the whole elemental dragon bloodline(Not completely sure if the nasuverse has such a thing, Arturiaβs dragon core, yes, an elemental dragonβs bloodline? Not so much.) and the boundary between βFateβ and other verses is completely shattered when you started to introduce things like the rinnegan or him being an βAsura.β This problem persists throughout the story but I guess itβs more me nagging on a small detail at this point.
The relationship and romance between Jason and other characters is alright but I would generally draw the line when he starts to cuck everyone else(Grayfia and Venelana) This is as well as his perverse nature just makes him a bit more hateable for me. As for his parents and sister, they are completely nonexistent except for a couple brief(read as βa singleβ) mention(s) throughout the story.
As the story progresses Jason as a character starts to get more and more arrogant. I suppose although it can be justified as he is stronger than most of the characters we have seen thus far, but again this makes him a bit more hateable for me(though Iβm sure some would enjoy it).
There were parts of the story that I enjoyed like Jasonβs encounter/adventure with the Grigori and Slash Dog, but most of the other parts like the whole going to school in England and the first 50 or so chapters is what I really just canβt bring myself to read.
Overall, when compared to some of the other fanfics that are just hard to read this one is quite a bit better. The canon characters were written nicely and the direction of the story, although a bit iffy, were still enjoyable.
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ShuraTheDestroyer
Well, this is my opinion
The mc is extremely nerfed constantly to the point of being defeated by a human. He is supposed to have the heart / soul of Ashura, which are basically incarnations of war, master of combat, and he doesn't even know how to fight straight yet !!! And even though he's from the upper realm with insanely powerful parents, he evolves slower than the xianxia-cultivated novel characters.
Dialogues have no emotion,are emotionless, they are simply text, they pass nothing. It still pisses me off that he saves Kuroka and asks Shirone to become Rias's servant, and she has even more potential than Kuroka herself. Another annoying fact is that mc should always interact with the gremory family, never another, always them, this is cliche to the max, another cliche is he always interact with one of the 3 factions, he could simply get closer to the Shinto faction or even the Hindu, the fact that he became Azazel's foster child literally "destroyed" the story for me. Not to mention that mc doesn't evolve into anything, emotionally, physically, or anything, it's still the same. History has evolved almost nothing in all of these chapters.
And as hell a dragon lineage of ice and fire has more potential power than dragons that can duplicate and divide power infinitely, others that are conceptual beings like dream and infinity. Even if the novel has concepts of cultivation, its having power based on ice and fire is nowhere near these other dragons, Maybe that's why he's so weak compared to other dragons., it remains weak even though it is from a divine realm.
Now about grammar I can not give much opinion, English is not my first language and I am not fluent in it. Although I find some grammatical errors I still find the story very readable. The refresh rate was also good so far, that the romance is stalled. But in short away, if you like a story Little elaborate and without compromise or plot building and character growth, read this story, otherwise not.
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Davis111
So I found this gem and started reading it, then noticed that it has not been updated in two weeks. Bummer right? So I'm perusing the author comments, reviews, etc and see that there is a Patreon. Good news! Well not so much, since the Patreon has less than 1/2 the chapters posted on webnovel. Not going to get any subscriptions like that. Seriously, I'm trying not to hate but that's just dumb.
So writing quality is pretty good, no errors that will break story immersion. Updates are terrible, like mentioned earlier, two weeks no update. Development, character design, world background - no complaints, upper level for fan-fiction with original MC insert.
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Zenfree
That...That was amazing
Could not stop myself from laughing.
Apperciate the time invested in this story and continue to look forward to more.
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Meag
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H1Gh_cH405
There's no logic on this story
The power level is just absurd
I don't hate harem but boi i hate this one
4.5 is too overated i think this story didn't deserve this
The main character has no real personality
I just can't stand this type of story this is too bad for me
But even tho the story is bad i still appreciate your effort
I'm sorry if i offended you im just being honest here
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SYIHAAKIRA
Hello, author when I can read a new chapter??
I hope can read it every day just like before.
Author are you busy that why you do not update a new chapter?
Or you do not have an idea to create and write a new chapter?
For me, this novel make me happy and have a nice day to full all my free time.
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just_some_random
Occasionally grammatical errors and pronoun mistakes (male characters referred to as 'she' and stuff) but overall its an enjoyable read. Need more chapters tho as a new ch hasn't been released in nearly a week π
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Brayon101
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xxKoroSensei
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IshmaelM
Overall i love this kind of novel that brings you the excitement about something new apart from the main storyline that you know and i believe fan fiction novel give different kind of opinion about the story itself.
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SenpaiAinzz
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Kreios_Sama
I love this novel. I want to see the new world soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
140 characters is a piece of **** so I have to write this fucking line.
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Superlazysister
Hehe harem ? Thats + for me hehe . One of my favourite genre . I hope its a good story and i will rate it 5 for harem hehehe @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@@
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Joeseph_Hays
A very fun read so far, my only complaints would be the many grammatical errors, translation errors, and the way the gender pronouns do not match the characters speaking.
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NyarlathotepThe2nd
I love the character desgin. I love the fact that you keep the names of most of the characters from both the fate series and Highschool dxd seris as well, english could be better
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