Brief but exciting. the character seems naive to express more his/her thoughts. My suggestion is, please dont worry to write more, it is frm the words we keep coming. If you write more, the more we could get the general tenor of your story. Please dont get tired in writing because i feel this novel will go attractive to others too. Keep writing.
Its a nice story but it it only had shorter chapters. By any means the reader kept hanging on the thoughts unrevealed in only few words. It is much better if the author strikes more of it to make the story more expressive and attractive, though, still, the author made the best. Thanks.
Alyvia_Norrad