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Characters act like the most dumb people that don't know common knowledge and have to be explained on how things work.
The mc doesn't even use his system to the fullest potential he just downright forgets about it in the beginning there were a lot of opportunities to use it to gain knowledge but he doesnt, he could probably use it to idk purify the bloodlines of his beasts but doesn't, he could teach his monsters and himself new skills but doesn't..
The world Background is just fully forced down our throats not giving us time to properly store that info for later but later on most of it becomes useless.
The mc acts and says he wants to be lay low, but all his actions are the opposite everything he does is the opposite, when the monsters attacked his school he killed them, when they went in the cave with the dungeon he took initiative and decided to go first, he showed off his monster in front of everyone when he get it in the school.
Writing quality is horrible, the author doesn't even have an editor or even edits his work to a good degree, almost none of the characters have a nice personality apart from the main and secondary characters.
This story has a lot of potential, if the author watches some videos on how to improve his writing and editing it will be amazing though that won't happen, sucks that such a good premise was written worse than it could have.
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I mean... It's enjoyable and readable but it's not exactly good. Imagine monster pet evolution. Just worse and a lot more grammatical errors and really weird sentence building some times
amazing idea poor execution. The character is not relatable at all and seems to not know what he is doing. Comes out as someone who does not understand how the real world works, nor does his maturity matches the character background story. world building is pretty and i love the idea. Just can hope for something similar in the future.
This is one of my favourite summoning / card game based novel. I especially like how the characters interact between each other and the sometimes mixed in funny moments, you just can't help but chuckle at those moments :)
this isnt really a good story the whole premise of the story is good the idea was a nice one and i hope someone does something like this but the story seems awful really i dont know what else to say im glad the author stuck with it at the end of the day he/she had a nice idea and made a story more than i did lol
The story is worth continuing, but it desperately needs an editor. I like brotherhood stories -- a very welcome relief from the distressingly common harem trash. Aside from grammar and punctuation, more care needs to be put into fleshing scenes out.
The theme of the story is good. But the MC is not upto my liking, he is lets say not like your usual MCs. The dude even forgets about his system all the time and needs the system fairy to remind him all the time and that's just irritating. He didn't use his system much until now, don't know why. But other than that it's good reading material. Just what I felt.
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The story is actually really good better than I thought it would be the characters are really good but they really do just throw out some characters out of nowhere and add information out of nowhere without any forewarning but other than that it's really good
The story is good, a nice MC not many stupid young masters to just be slapfaced
The weak points in my opinion is the description is lacking like the grading colors that is just guessing
And i personally like Systems but not when it comes with a store since it kills the heart of the story and the adventures since is so easy to get itens and become op
Brotherhood is not my cup tea is make my body Cold. well dont give up is good story
hans : liltle bro
max : big bro
Hans : big bro im gonna save you
Max : i will wait for youbig bro
Me : my eyes hurt
I like this story but the writing quality needs a little work. There are quite a few grammatical errors and redundant statements. The main points are understandable but it is a little difficult to fully enjoy the story.
I like the story π
Keep update it fluently and story development.
I think u can focus more in building the character personality cause MC does not leave a lot of impression.
Still keep up u doing great.
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