Chapter comments on the chapter The Day It All Started《Rewriting》 of the book Surviving the Zombie Apocalypse with an Ether-Virus Cultivating System

Yeah.... This isn't how you treat a friend after a breakup that they have been in for years.... Couple of weeks maybe....

nice.

Don't know if you are a native speaker or not but try read your work out loud to make sure the sentences flow correctly. You have way too many comma's and ellipses around the place. It makes my brain split in half when I try to read a flow then pause because of a comma.

"yOu aRe cRyiNg jUsT bEcAuSe yOuR gIrLfRiEnD iS bReAkInG wItH yOu?" What an antipathetic @sshole with an EQ lower than my chances of getting laid

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thanks for the chapter