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Chainslock
When I first read chapter 1, I was instantly hooked. You see I’m a first-impression-matters kind of person. The author conveyed detailed description without being overly intrusive. Grammar has little to no errors. Intriguing plot paired with an intricate writing. Nothing much I could really critique.
Good job.
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NotUse
The plot itself is amazing, the writing is well thought and creative. It's easy to imagine all the scenarios taking place, plus, the characters are lovable. Nice work👍👍👍
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ZephyrIsMe
I'm not here for grammatical errors as I am bad at it. But my experience when I'm reading your novel is good. Though what I found a bit concerning is paraphrasing. Few paragraphs are just too long and look like a block of words if you're reading it by mobile phone. I suggest you make the paragraphs shorter.
Good luck author, may God bless you in your writing career
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Kari_Rakitan
I like how you introduce the central conflict right away. You explain what is happening without dwelling on unnecessary details. It's awesome that women are knighted in this universe.
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The_Canary
Wow, what an experience after reading your story. I know it has the same plot like transported to other world, but you placed a different twist on it. It may have long paragraphs, but I like it. I got a better picture of that world. Keep it up!
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Shiksha_Jerath
The author doesn't have many grammatical errors which is a blessing tbh. I am tired of reading works which are peppered with grammatical errors.
Anyways, the author has a good grasp of the English language which makes for a good read where the reader doesn't have to keep on correcting the sentence in their own mind.
Though the paraphrasing could use a bit of work, it doesn't take away from the enjoyment of reading the story.
I would recommend shorter sentences and paragraphs.
All the best for your future endeavors, Author!
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Gourmet_DAO
Synopsis is already fascinating. Let's see how the author managed to develop this idea? Let's go read it! That's how dangerous it immediately gets on its feet, they only need to be hung from the bed))))) Ahahahhahahahaaa !!! The first chapter, the first lines already impress! Not the fact that having reached the end, a literary hero or a real hero will return home. The system is an insidious thing, it will go to the end, and there the system will say, well, the guy you got was a joke. But let's see, the author can also arrange the plot differently. Oh, the protagonist as Princess Alice Melvin from the "pumpkin scissors" had the same gift! The first chapter is amazing, read on! Interestingly, after watching modern horror films, is the hero still afraid of medieval monsters? He should not be afraid of them, if he read a prayer and gained enlightenment of the soul, comprehending the Tao, he would not be afraid of darkness. But probably the young Padawan had not yet comprehended the path and gained the strength of the Jedi. And probably the hero did not look like Bosch and Goi. Oh, the hero seems to have found a room of supremas ?! And now he will become one of the superheroes. Hey man, don’t let out squeals! You got the money, grab and run! Eh, a modern person would understand what happened to him, and some kind of hero turned out to be whispering, not a watchman. But reading is interesting. Third chapter? Oh no, I forgot to read the prologue. And he looks something like the Wizard of the Earthsea, Ursula Le Guin. Tombs of Antoine ?! But now we go to the third chapter, but this is not a typical, classical review, but simply my thoughts after reading the chapters. The author is generally well done, he writes fascinatingly and intriguingly. So after reading one chapter I want to read and find out what happened next ?!
It is very interesting to read, it is written cool, I read up to chapter 6. This novel has potential. I’m sure that in two or three months 100-200 thousand readings will already be read. Only need to properly promote! In the meantime, get 10 reviews to get into the rating. This novel will promote itself. Since the story itself is interesting, understandable, but at the same time intrigue is preserved.
The author of success in creativity !!!
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May1st
Not bad! But bruh! The chapter is so long haha.
You need to break paragraph and also, the MC's reaction doesn't really fit for someone who suddenly find himself in an unknown land.
He's too cooperative with the situation and made it less exciting.
Those were my thought, others may be cool with it!
The story looks good and grammar is nice! Wish you all the best.
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BlackCarapace
I think your paragraph is too long. you can cut it into pieces.
how much word in the second chapter? It's very long chapter.
you can mix the tought of the main character, rather than using too much description.
and what's wrong with the main character? It's reincarnation story. He must be dumbfounded first with the situation rather than walking around like know everything.
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