Chapter comments on the chapter The Truth Of Origin of the book Way Of The Darkness

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Good start

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I just read the first chapter. The idea is nice. But in the first few paragraphs there is a bit of an overload of names. That makes it a bit bumpy to read.

BTW, nice book cover.

Great! you have finally started. the story looks unique and different from others. I am sure it will be amazing. Also, the chapter is clear and comprehensible. just keep focusing on Worldbuilding so that the readers will be more engaged.

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I have only read the first chapter, and I must say, I'm impressed! The way you defined Heaven and Earth, at the same time, their creator, Primordial Origin, was really something else! However, there are a few things I'd like to point out. First, you excessively used the words "Primordial Origin" again and again, making the chapter a bit dull. You could use synonyms, or something else that refers to the same thing, (Maybe something like the Greater Soul, Mother Origin or something) making the chapter easier to digest. Also, there are a few parts where the flow of words seemed a bit distorted. Like, in one part, you wrote: "Despite what happened, the Primordial Origin didn't have any time to ponder about what happened." The words "What Happened" came twice in the same sentence, and not in a beautiful way. You can write: "Despite what happened, the Primordial Origin didn't have any time to ponder about the past." The meaning remains the same, but the flow isn't distorted (I think). Anyhow, I had fun, so I'm gonna keep reading it! Looking forward to the next chapters!

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It has good grammar and doesn't have harem, as long as its acceptable you've got me hooked on, now take my power stones

Really wanted to give this a shot but the amount of mistakes in this first chapter is way to atrocious to overlook

I like the first chapter

So far so good going to binge read this soon :)

Thank you for writing this chapter author great work! ♡

Mc is a monster in previous life so please don't let him make any stupid mistakes. I would feel really bad.. If Possible make sure his enemies smart.. Because cultivation world most of are old monsters themselves.. If lived long enough even fish can become dragon.. Thanks For The Chapter..