I NEEEED more Please. anyway good story im so hooked and i hope to read more in the future. I only reviewed this in hopes of giving the author motivation to keep writing. i have only reviewed like 2 other stories before this !please dont drop this story.
Really enjoyed reading this, the writing had no issues and was enjoyable to read. The character development and story pace were just right. At times it did feel slow but I believe this was because of me reading so many trash fast-paced isekai novels that I started to think that was normal.
So yeah, I recommend it and it's a shame the author is too busy to work on this novel. I hope one day he picks it up since it's really enjoyable to read.
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The first 30-ish chapters were rather bland so I almost gave up on this, later on, it does start to rope you in especially after the system starts getting questioned.
Overall, the grammar could be a bit better and the story itself a bit more polished but I cannot criticise it that much.
It is by no means a masterpiece but it should provide everyone with an enjoyable read.
I'm going to start with my criticism. I feel characters aren't flesh out enough.
now to the good stuff. this book slaps, it's an enjoyable read. what stands out to me is how the system is helping him deal with is emotions as it can affect him and what he needs to accomplish. I like the story, I dont know if there are others like it but this book is a new favourite
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I'm surprised the story doesn't have more views / reviews since it seems to be right up the alley of a lot of readers on WN. Its well paced, not too short and not too long, the grammar is good and the story flows nicely and it doesn't deviate from the plot (so far) like others stories in the genre do.
With all that said however there's a few personal negatives that I do wish to address:
1. While I understand why we can't get answers too soon as to why the MC is so disconnected from the world around him (little to no remorse for what happens to living beings around him) it still feels cheap to have the System keep information away from us, the readers. Giving us hints here and there so that we can think what the reason is would invest us even more into the story.
2. The way the game portion is introduced is rather lackluster, more specifically, the player's. Even though this is a novel, if you are going to write about having beta testers in a game, having only 20 is not something any game (mmo) has or would ever do. On top of that, we're talking about "players" here, I'm sure you know how the absolute majority would act during a beta. Everyone would look for ways to break the game in some shape or form, would troll other players, grief and so on. The fact that they just follow the story like they're playing a singleplayer game is very unnatural. You could have expanded more on this to give a better understanding why they're acting in such a manner.
3. The non-player guildies are rather quick to accept messages appearing in their minds and video's being displayed on front of them. When the first ever movie was shown to an audience in a cinema, pandemonium broke out as people thought the train on the screen was coming at them and they would die. Your non-player humans act way too calm. And I know that there's magic in this world, but that hasn't been explored too much (in fact, barely even touched), so we as readers have no idea if these humans are so calm because they think its magic (this being common knowledge) or for some other reason.
These are my gripes with the story so far. Like I said, its a good story and it definately deserves more views. Keep up the good work.
The story has great potential! but sadly it is not for me. It follows the character with a guild system, that at first i would imagine it should be considered the creation of the mythical adventurers guild, but sadly it is not so. it is a players guild not the adventures guild there is a difference.
The mc is one dimensional, there is barely any world background, and magic is severely under utilize for what i can perceive. by what i can tell, there will be plenty of plot armor, outrageously bless by luck mc and unnecessary conflict where shouldn't have been none.
A character like the mc's situation would have to be extremely concern about how the terrible consequences his action would take, but he seems oblivious about it.
but just because is not for there will be people that will enjoy the story so keep it up!
Hi Author here, so this is my second time writing a system based novel. The first one didn't quite go as I predicted. So I hope I got a bit better than the last time.
Please bear with me as it takes me quite a few chapters before I finish the setup of my story.
Just started reading this novel and I'm a huge fan. The pacing is nice and the author doesnt waste an abundance of time on reptative or unnecessary explanations. The story flows from one moment to the next quite well. A lot of great ideas so far and I'm really looking forward to what the author has in store for the future. Please continue to bless us with more chapters Mr author!!
This novel is very well thought out and has a small little attitude twist for the system. The chapters are relatively short but it works okay with the novel so far. The system itself seems interesting and I'm excited to see how the story progresses!