Reviews of Zodiac Queen by Ongja - Webnovel

Author-nim, your story is superb please write more! Notice me Author-nim, please write more. I'll look forward to more updates, Author-nim. I love your story, please write more! ^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~^_~

I'm going to dive in the technicalities first. I noticed a myriad of misuse/absence of punctuation marks. Most often than not, these mistakes will eventually lead to comma splices/run-ons. Please watch out for them. Although they don't affect your plot, they do have an effect on the speed of transitions. Furthermore, I descried some tautologies and redundancies in some sentences. Let me give an example from the auxiliary. [ Ascended the stairs up to the podium -> ascended the stairs to the podium ] Ascended already has the connotation of going up, The verb tenses are quite inconsistent throughout. For third person POV, it might be better to use past tense form of the verb unless unwarranted. I do appreciate how you want to describe the visuals of your characters, but I do think you could be better :> Rather than simple adjectives, utilize the imagination of the readers. Describe them like you are describing the color of the seas, sky, or the fauna. There are readers who will prefer creative wordiness than those passages lacking in details. The pacing was just fine to me, not too hasty nor slow. Although it might've been not confusing for me, please put some indicators in the dialogues. The readers could get lost in the midst of the consecutive statements. Also, there are some bulky paragraphs, creating no ******* at all. You could divide them for easier reading. For the characters, they have yet to unveil their unique propensities, so it's quite difficult to distinguish them among the paragraphs. Usually, their parlance or habits would help in letting them be identified. I saw like, a couple of sentences that deviated you from the third person POV, but it could be solved by mere single quotations. I do adore Zimian though. Su Yu, you made her freaking cry, so you deserve a slap! Although, Zimian already gave you the insult that you need! Take that you rich CEO! Poor mian though, yet a bada*s one! :< The experiment took a toll on her. Please let Su Yu track down those monsters! I like that there's an abundance of sceneries in your story, displaying your wide imagination! Just work on the transitions in between and it would look even more phenomenal. Overall, Ongja, I liked reading your work :> It's such a rollercoaster of events that it immerses the readers on to what's going to happen next. Rest assured that you're a brilliant writer. I just pointed out all the mistakes, because, as the creator of our works, there are some mistakes in our stories that we can't see for ourselves. (Please don't hate me after I post this :< Delete it if you don't want to see it.) I'll be cheering you on!

I love this novel! Thank you for writing this, Author! More chapters please! ^_^ I love this novel! Thank you for writing this, Author! More chapters please! ^_^ I love this novel! Thank you for writing this, Author! More chapters please! ^_^ I love this novel! Thank you for writing this, Author! More chapters please! ^_^ I love this novel! Thank you for writing this, Author! More chapters please! ^_^ I love this novel! Thank you for writing this, Author! More chapters please! ^_^ I love this novel! Thank you for writing this, Author! More chapters please! ^_^ I love this novel! Thank you for writing this, Author! More chapters please! ^_^

Review Swap huh.... Deal! Liked your work and I have to give it to you , its not everytime that someone uses Zodiac, just kidding. Keep up the good work