this is so disapointing...i liked the MC only in first chp , after he act like a kid...all the people around him get hurt and he says he will protect them but even after his parents death he is still an idiot...the girl gets hurt cause he is an M so he can lvl his skill...he acts a young master talks with his enemy , leaves them alive after coming for his girl....typical chines novel...sends his girl to a sect but he doesn't want to go cause the sect puts everything on talent=))))...he even sents his brother to the sect "protection"kinda...everything is not well thought this grandfather "grand elder" is like a regular member of the clan even normal elders just disrespects him and he just stays there...
I don't get these stories at all..................................................................................................................................................................................................................
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Overall the plot is simple in which the protagonist lives his life one from scratch upon death, but the structure is nicely done to the point where you can follow Leo and his story in this new world he's in.
My only criticism about this story is how the world is presented from time to time. As I read chapter to chapter, I noticed that there tends to be either telling, showing, or both at the same time. I wish I could see some cities, places or cultures/systems be shown through Leo's eyes based on what he sees instead of being told. In addition, some of the paragraphs within several chapters seems a bit big, to the point where I felt I was reading a ton of information within a single paragraph.
Overall however, I would recommend this story to anybody who enjoys the tale of a protagonist who wants to live a new and even better life in a different world.
The writing quality is not bad here... It's easy to understand, comprehend, and imagine. Though some aspects are confusing... It's a good read overall.
The story development is good IMO... I like this aspect of the story... like how the progress is smooth.
The characters are designed well, even the side characters... though a little more description is needed. /me screams I HATE THAT FAT BULLY
Yes, the world background is good. The sorroundings are described well. There could be more desctiption on the overall world... but then the story has just began.
First off, I love the plot. The synopsis conveys the background perfectly. As for the first chapter, I think it's too sudden. Like you haven't really explained what is going on and then bam! A boy is stuck on breaking ice? That's confusing. You might want to add a bit more description. Other than that, an amazing story!!
Every reincarnated book I read made my heart ache!
I really love reading something like this -- and also watching korean dramas with this genre -- because everything is described with so heartbreaking past, and this book is gonna give me some feels again!❤
May this book be blessed with many readers, check this out!
Unlike some who would just drop a "I love your story so much!", Well except if they've reviewed your book before then it's fine. I'll go straight to the point. I love the setting your story portrays, the supernatural, the fantasy realm sort of thing It's a nice plot, the three wishes synopsis made me think of genie, but you've taken that and brought it into a beautiful story line.
I personally love Fantasy novels! So would be adding this to my reading list!
All being said, keep up the good work.
My first time reading this story. The first chapter introduces a lot. I love the character design and the way the surrounding is explained. It makes you literally visualize being inside the book itself and being the character. Overall, it’s a really interesting book that have left me in curiosity. Keep on writing! I recommend reading this book due the the interesting events, characters and story development. You will love it!
A very interesting concept that is usually seen in these cultivation type of stories.
I loved how serene and friendly the God of the world seemed and how gently he spoke with Leornidas(sorry if the name is wrong).
The chapter was a smooth read for me and the portrayal of the scene and characters was well done. This seems like very promising work and from the first chapter itself, it really entices you to find out what happens in the next chapter as well incites a feeling to root for the main character.
Nice story, a boy who reincarnate to another boy but more weak than him. He's need to search many answer about new world he entered. The character design is good, The world-fantasy is explored as well. Good job author.