Reviews of Alive: Dream World (ON PAUSE) by red_grapes - Webnovel

A refreshing novel. The characters won't give you a stress. Includes ACTION scenes like sword-fighting, archery, horseback riding and etc. Unlimited ROMANCE between the female lead and the male leadssss (7 MALE LEADS to be exact). Also, includes COMEDY scenes. TOUCHING family scenes and INTRIGUING past stories of some characters (future chapters). I'm the author, by the way. I just gave a shamelessly 5 star review of my own novel. Thank you for reading my novel!!

First of all, I just want to say that your novel is AMAZING!! The storyline is really nice and it's flows so naturally. Really straight to the point without so much merry-go-rounds.✨ I really love the interactions between Laurana and the princes too❤️ but I'm not gonna lie, I love love LOVE the relationship between the princes the most except for Egon, Henri and Jihan of course (really hope they make up😪) Romeo and Henri are hilarious!😂😂😂 My favourite part of the story? Theo and Laurana!♡♡ I really hope their ship sails😋 I wanted Egon to suffer in the hands of love but now, *sighs* I'm taking it back 😪 The suspense is really cool too, you really pulled it off! There are a few grammatical errors here and there but that doesn't make it less awesome though.😊 I love that what I've read hasn't told me all about the story and there's many more to come, really keeps me on my toes.. My review is too long, sorrry🤭 just had to let it all out..❤️✨💜 Love your book cover too ✨

Late on my review but the author has written a story with a lot of potential. The beginning chapters feel a little rushed but I believe as the story progresses it will even out. There is a fair bit of set up for an exciting story with interesting characters and a charming FL. Looking forward to see how the novel progresses, good job!

Sorry for taking so long. The story was marvelous coupled with good development. However, there were some grammar mistakes that need to be re-edited. Keep up the good work

Curious. There're some in inconsistencies in terms of word usage. Fairly minor considering it didn't really bother me, but another read through would fix it, no problem. Story wise, it all flows rather smoothly, though in my opinion, there're some parts that felt a bit stiff. Perhaps some metaphor or similes could be used for that. Otherwise, it's all good and would read again. Keep on writing 👍

I love this story, its really driven by the characters in it and they are all nice. Typically in these types of stories the MC is always faced with some hostility or another but not here. She is really having the time of her life. Its a very cute and sweet story. I want to know more about the mystery behind her memories but i have my own theories. I feel like she has transmigrated into one of her past lives and she is just remembering bits about it. And 7 love interests! That's bound to get interesting XD Their characters are not flat or boring like most princes, they are all equally interesting and have personality. The author really did a good job with this. Keep it up author!

Let's start with the negatives and I hope this part isn't too harsh. The tense shifts often from past to present and present to past. It may be hard to edit but with perseverance and patience, you'll surely be able to fix those mistakes. There were also times when I noticed some errors. This can be fixed with proofreading or by hiring an editor but if you are aspiring to become a great author then I suggest that you proofread instead of hiring an editor since in this way you can improve your mistakes. Here are some of the mistakes I noticed: -There was this paragraph when it said, "The girls was shocked, but they called the physician immediately and helped me lie in bed." If you were to correct this sentence, it should be, "The girls were shocked..." since was is used for singular and were for plural. -As for the word "onward" I noticed that most people add an s to the end so it ends up being "onwards" I noticed this in your novel too and wanted to tell you that there is no s. When it comes to the descriptions, it was not vivid as first. I was planning to rate the category a four-star but I made the decision not to after reading the next chapters. The first chapter lacked description such as the paragraph that stated, "I never imagined myself wearing this fancy outfit for breakfast." perhaps you could describe more about this outfit such as the color, the texture, and other qualitative words. When reading the next chapter, the descriptions improved which is a positive thing hence the category will be rated with five stars. For the main plot, I only have a few problems. One is that the physician told them that he couldn't figure out why Laurana lost her memories and it turned out the maids were fine with this. If I was a maid in that exact situation and the doctor told me that he couldn't figure out why the princess lost her memory then I'd be panicking or worried for Laurana unless losing memories is a typical thing in the world in which Laurana was reincarnated into. (Forgot the spelling of the place hehe.) There are also a lot of comma misuse, perhaps you can check them out. Some are periods which must be replaced to commas and others are commas which must be replaced to periods. In some dialogues, there were times when a period was used instead of a comma. I will give an example when to use a comma at the very end of a dialogue. Ex: "Be nice." he said. It should be, "Be nice," he said. The last negative is the perspective or point of view. There were times when it seemed third person and times when it was first-person. This could be fixed with proofreading but it will take time. Though, it has a lot of advantages since it can help improve your writing quality. Here are the positives! One thing I like about the book are the names of the characters. They are very catchy and attention-grabbing. The names of the places are also unique wherein the majority of it is extremely hard to spell for me. Text block is great and I like how the romance slowly builds up. Also, it reminds me of the Princess Diaries. I suggest that you watch it in case you haven't. The paragraphs are not that lengthy and not that short either. As for the stability of updates, this is always an automatic five for me since I always prefer quality over quantity. Don't get pressured and always take some breaks once in a while. I think I had mentioned this already but I'll just mention it again. The descriptions drastically improved as I read further. I would like to compliment the author for this! Great job! The pace is smooth, nothing seemed rushed or hastened and it didn't seem slow either. Character Design, definitely a five since there was a chapter explaining all the looks of the characters and their ages alongside their specialties and personalities. Famous genres calls for cliches and I noticed there were minimal cliches here and the author added his or her own twists to the story which is excellent. Cliches are entirely not bad too but people prefer to get sleepy when they see the same situation happening in a novel they recently read. Still, like what I said, the cliches here are minimal and for the readers who are reading this, this book definitely deserves a try. This is all and I wish the author the very best! I hope this review wasn't too harsh (not really trying to be harsh) and I wrote it at the best way possible. Hopefully you'll gain more readers and collections. Keep reading to hone your writing skills and if there is anything difficult to understand you can check for tips in YouTube and Google. I noticed you were a Filipino too and if I may suggest, there is this page entitled : "Team Lyqa: Civil Service Review" in Facebook. She teaches a lot about grammar and vocabularies, perhaps you would like to watch some of her videos. Anyway, best wishes to the author and keep on writing!

The story is a transmigration cliche but has its own twists to it. The MC didn't have any previous memories of the owner of the body she transmigrated into. So she had to figure out everything in this new world and make her life. And that's where I'm kinda disappointed. Because the whole issue was simply swept aside by her stating she lost her memories and a doctor's check which revealed there's nothing wrong with her. And everyone just accepted she lost her memories and moved on. I'm not saying that's bad or anything but... its just too simple and easy. Instead it would've been more interesting to read how she manages everything in a new world without her memories or letting others realize she's not who she is. (Thats just my opinion though.) And on that thought, the concept of the original owner's memories coming back to her makes it a lot interesting and a bit of a mysterious vibe to it. And the premise of seven suitors courting her is a really cool concept. There are no major errors in writing quality except some tense switches here and there; and the narration also goes back and forth between 1st person and 3rd person. Rest is good. All the best.

The characters are pleasant, there is intrigue, but in the first chapters it is only declared, it will probably be revealed in the future. The text block is well written, there are almost no mistakes. Romantic scenes are described. There are some rough edges, the use of a cliché, however, does not spoil the story itself a little. If the author can add to the story, more emotions, experiences, shows the inner world of the characters, then the novel will be brighter, deeper, more exciting than it is now. In general, this is a promising novel, I added it to my library. So far I have read 6 chapters. I hope the author will be able to make his novel even more intriguing than it is now. Overall rating is 4.8 stars.

I have said it once and i will say it again, character driven stories are a beautiful work of art. This story has some well built and interesting the characters. The hook of 7 possible love interests has hooked me deep into the story.

Seven love interest. It immediately caught my attention. The story is well written and I was able to connect with the FL immediately. Good work author. Keep it up.

An interesting story about a girl who gets a second chance to live a better life. (Get what she did not have in her first life.) The author does a wonderful job of introducing the story and the world. It is very descriptive and allows the reader to easily imagine the scenery, clothing and the world. The story unfolds by revealing little pieces of information, always keeping it interesting and making the reader want to read more. The characters (princes) are revealed, and each one is quite interesting. Overall, the author had done a splendid job with the story! Recommended!

Very sweet and cute story about an isekaid girl that is having the time of her life while enjoying the company of a lot of handsome princes. While the characters are not particularly deep imo, they are all likable in one way or another and it's a fun chill read following this princess living her days with the princes. Also, Theo is best boy, so he better win!

The author has done great work Describing thoroughly the scenes. You'll be really curious who the real male lead is. I seriously don't knw why are you here still reading reviews Go read the story!!

This is a good novel and is fun to read. It got interesting characters that is not repitive. The naming sense of the author really hits me. I felt ashamed that I only use a simple, first name and no surname on my novel lol.😂😂 I Recommend this to everyone who is looking for a good novel to read. Read the chapter 1 and you will definetely know at a glance that it is a good novel.

this book is really great. the scenes are really descriptive with all the characters unique and different. It is a great novel with a unique twist to transmigration novels. Just loved it 4.9/5 for me.

The author has done great work by showing the readers the scenes by describing thoroughly the scenes. It was well-written and a stress-reliever. The seven princes will keep you curious about who the real male lead is. I like the story development. Please update more chapters!! Good job author!

The author has done a good job with describing the scenes. It was engaging and fun to read. The seven princes will keep you guessing who the real ml is. I like a little surprise. Good job author!

I am a huge fan of a fantasy novel 😁😁 This one is interesting and realistic....loving it so far. Nice work author👏👏👏 And of course, I will recommend it to others.