Very good. I like the idea of putting a slice of life in the chapters, because it slows down the plot a little but it doesn't make the story bad. If done well it makes it very interesting because it presents more of the characters which makes us more attached to them.
I need more chapters, I'm addicted🤤🤤🤤🤤😫😫😫.
please keep up the good work.
another thing: he/she/it have a 's' at the end of their verbs in present tense, the plurals (we, you, they) do not:
S/He does whatever, we do nothing.
in case of auxillary verbs can, may, shall should, could, would and so on, there is no "s" at the end of the verbs, just their regular forms:
it could go wrong, they may walk away.
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