honestly i think you made a great start but i find it hard to read about
self sacrificing character that would even forgive the one hurting them as i find it impossible to understand and empathize with them so I am leaving but good luck grammar pretty good idk about world building solid character
Shameless author review incoming! Yeah, I wrote this story and I think it's awesome, but I really would love to hear what you think about it! I'm really excited to see where this story goes with all of you.
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