Jklee

2yr

Commented

pretty good so far. keep em coming.

ch 0 2 Chapter 2 Rascals

Jklee

2yr

Commented

leg should heal*. Healing is the action. an example. It's not healing properly. Heal is the end result. example. will he be able to heal him?.

"Ok, it is done for now, and your leg should healing. You my friend are one tough person to be able to overcome the pain," Rydin complimented him after pulling out the thorns as the light circle withered away.

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Others · frieddarkchoclate

Jklee

2yr

Commented

the man* .. single not plural.. could describe the direction of the elbow hit. I assume he is behind him? I assume if behind it would be a reverse elbow. as a horizontal, downward, upward, spearing, dropping and spinning elbow are generally a forward action toward a target. ✌️

The men immediately went for an elbow hit and were caught by the person without trying.

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Others · frieddarkchoclate

Jklee

2yr

Commented

could replace the first word nothing with a description of nothing. i.e. no hills, slopes no rocks or grass, just a boundless emptiness stretching as far as I could see.

Looking around, all he sees is a white void, nothing... Just pure nothing. I'm mean he tried looking in every direction from side to side and still, he sees not one thing or someone.

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Others · frieddarkchoclate

Jklee

2yr

Commented

a man*

A Men opens his eyes and as soon as he does he was hit with a white light blinding him for the moment. He rubs his eyes trying to get rid of the problem.