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AnonAuthor: To unlock a new character he must Kill their Victims from the Movie while he's in control of their bodies. He must go inside their head to unlock them, slowly driving him mad just like them. What do you think?HORROR FILM VILLAIN SUMMONER · C6
FangMing: I come to give advice, criticism and opinion.
Tip: Do not use multiple POVs I saw them in a few previous chapters (with the Allyson dd) let me tell you my experience, personally the POVs are difficult to do because they can be annoying or unnecessary at times (Allyson's POV was very steep desdd My point of view and unnecessary I would dare to say) doing them requires experience writing (not multiple POVs but as a writer) something you don't have.
Criticism: This is referring to the novel, you do not need to be a "perfect" writer to realize that you have to have "constancy" and how to say "organization" when creating a novel. First many novels fail in the fact that his MC is a guy with experience in life and is 200 years old (this is an example) and then his MC seems only your typical 17 year old boy with hormonal problems. Do you see the fault there? In relation to your MC is a guy who has been through a lot, has experience in harsh environments (because of the configuration you did) then, seeing him being an idiot who did not realize that "intention to kill" was not effective against a Being "NOT DEAD" is a bit ... Uff do you see the bug?
Opinion: Your novel is good (the idea) we know that you are not a "perfect" writer (nobody is) but those things are "basic" even for newbies, for them what the boy wrote you is a constructive criticism (He did not express it in the best way) but it is in you to get something good out of that "criticism" (in the end the criticisms are to emphasize errors, even the constructive ones) if that criticism bothers you then ... What you are looking for is not a criticize if not an "opinion" and an "advice".
In retrospect I like the idea of your novel, I could mention more failures but I summarize them here. Try not to let the MC be so "forgetful" (if you do it so that it doesn't generate that from a comic touch, if not that it gives an idiotic touch to the situation and character), try to make it less volatile to your emotions, remember that is not a child is a man who has gone through many bad and good things (of course lose his temper for a person who betrayed him or something else is more or less normal, but against a monster?) well ... Also try to improve your grammar (I am not the best to say it but it is advice) and the way of telling the story is about it being one, for better or worse.Reincarnation Of Third-rate Swordsman · C10
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LGND: Look for every war zone that the US entered
U can see it if u r willing to lookStronghold In The Apocalypse
Drako_Shattersword: So from the revolutionary war to ww2 to the Iraq war the U.S military are horrible? I think you need to look at all the facts. There may be some immoral events but that is not as much as what the good theyve done and what military hasnt? What country are you from?Stronghold In The Apocalypse
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Hiehie_: Well, with your input and distance from the story you're right. I was too focused on something when I wrote this part that I didn't take in consideration that the professor natural reactions wasn't to be shocked and disoriented by this abnorbal behavior. They are pro so they should have recovered fast enough to act. Sorry, (^ - ^")Harry Potter - Another Dark Lord · C7
HolyJoker: Yeah I am sorry too dude I was salty also in the first review and I had to go to my shi*ty part time job and I just woke up and I was kind of salty too. By the way I would also like a story like that but all of them that are even half decent nerf the MC or make him do stupid stuff. I first wanted to do that also but I then thought it would be hard to write an Inuzuka that would be able to keep up with Naruto, Sasuke, Madara etc... I also didn't want a system or to pull new OP powers out of nowhere sooooo yeah.
Hope you find a Story you like, its hard to find the stories you like in here that aren't dropped. Hope you find it though.Naruto: Dream to immortality
HolyJoker: If you don't like it then you don't like it dude no need to be so salty, it just simply is not for you. The Mc is supposed to be a psycho I don't know how you didn't get the memo man. Even the cover says all. No need to leave a 1 star. Maaaaaaan c'mon I liked my 4.9 star thing that I had going on. You could have left a comment I read those also.Naruto: Dream to immortality
Andy2109: Can someone remind me who is trevor?Birth of the Demonic Sword · C150
daoistxuanlong: ...yup before you go kill yourself first tell us your name so we can send flowers second finish this story we have been waiting ages and lastly I recommend a gun quick and painless but fucking scary so it might help you change your mind in between plus you won’t get brain damage like hanging or drowning and you won’t **** up your organs like in using drugsHarry Potter: Library Of Heavens Magic Path(Closed)) · C12
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IO22: No, he will be suppressed in Slytherin because most of the pure blood consider the Weasley's as blood traitors , well at least the bigots, which Slytherin is full of. Besides think of how it will affect his family cause Weasley's is a non Griffindor. I am not saying to put him in Griffindor, but just not in Slytherin because of the attention that will be brought to the MC.Ron Weasley: A Noble's Ascension · C28
HasaDigaEebowai: with the way the ron is being developed it would be too stupid to send him to ravenclaw ... he needs to go to slytherinRon Weasley: A Noble's Ascension · C28
F0rk: i will try its just that there isnt much info to find about topo or small company's in 1940 so i will have to make up totally random stuff and the romance bits are gonna be slowly building up into a whole spreading over the chapters thanks for the advice though :)Reborn in Marvel? · C3
IO22: Don't really force Romance, it never works out. Take it slowly.Reborn in Marvel? · C3
Sorenmageofmareth: None of this is making me hate the king. All of it is making me feel sorry for him l.
Also I have more dislike for Jack for being a little masochist ***** and an ass. Seeing as he has a revenge quest on the king and **** on guild master who's threatening murder.The Achievement Junkie · C8
guilhermecoimbra: I read this novel once which Harry did a ritual to integrate his wand to one of his phalange bones and similar wand to the other hand... food for thought.Harry Potter and the darkness · C34
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