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should be "plotting" of fate in the story development part of the review

I found the writing quality to be high, specifically the sentences were spaced well, the word choice was concise. There were also areas that could be improved, particularly there could be a little more descriptive words added in when events happen. For example in the first chapter when he was reminiscing about when the Principle called child services to talk to him about his family situation, the author said there was a painful grimace on his face but it could have been better to describe the pain (what kind of pain came with the grimace? did it throb? was it sharp or dull? did it last a long time? etc...). other examples would be when in chapter 7 after waking from getting assaulted he felt both relieved and annoyed but it doesn't really talk about how it felt to be relieved or annoyed at the time (was the relief like the feeling of a cool breeze on a hot day or was it like a weight lifted of his shoulder when he found his arm in a splinter? was the annoyance bubbling like it was boiling rapidly or slowly like the wind eroding a stone?) In regards to the story development there really isn't anything new just yet. The MC dies, gets reincarnated with a cheat, though a I have not read where the cheat is clicker game but considering the MC was skilled at playing the clicker games on Earth this is nothing really new. Afterward he does try to escape the "plotting" fate which does it make interesting but until he successfully does so it would remain fairly predictable. Admittedly this will likely be easily resolved as the story gets longer and even just 14 chapters in there is not a part of the story that I can just point to and say "this feels very forced" instead it flows well together, very likely to be planned out in advance. The Character design is good and logical. When Yui realizes that she became the very type of person she hated, her thoughts go back to when her grandmother told her that she wasn't ready which she now understood was a good touch, describing the change in her emotions with more descriptive words like before would be better but the progression of emotions was accurate considering what types emotions people feel in similar real life situations. Furthermore the actions of the characters match well with their personalities, obviously the characters were well thought out before being actually written in and their motivations for doing things is expressed clearly and further elaborated upon when the chance shows up (like Yui becoming a warrior to getting away from being forced to be a concubine but in a later chapter mentioning how she wouldn't even be able to have children if she hadn't escaped). They are not just a cookie cutter description that pasted on and forgotten about later like some authors do but they actually affect the way the story develops making it feel like the people are really trying to live their lives to the best of their ability. The update frequency of this novel is fairly high (14 chapters in 5 days = ~3 chapters/day) and this author has proven their commitment to finishing the projects they started so even if updates slow down they will still be consistent. better yet this author is more than willing to communicate how things are going for them in regards to the state of the book and interacts with the readers both actively during discussions on Discord and by replying to comments (which by the way are all being read). Lastly the world development was familiar enough to Earth that there wasn't a lot of introduction needed giving this story a low barrier of entry but was also different enough with the introduction of cultivation and it's effects on society that lets it be an interesting "What if"/Alternate Universe. Overall I find this novel to interesting and am willing to wait and see where the author takes us on this adventure as well as look forward to how they include things like legendary heroes and monsters.