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Okay I will begin by being blunt , in terms of writing quality this is probably one of the superior novels this site. However, in that same line it fails spectacularly as a novel. It is sophisticated- filled with analogy, imagery and a vocabulary rarely seen- but it's also something that makes even the most mundane seem far more extraordinary. The literature used is so profound that one can simply not connect with the actual content. Especially dialogues, it's hard to imagine any teenager or on that not anybody speaking such English in today's landscape. My advice to the author would be to maintain a balance. Its' integral to the flow of any story. However, if the author is using this novel as a thought exercise or as a pronouncement of literary achievement then do so and go ahead. anyhow pretty nice

I feel those words 😔 though really good work

Really liking it. Though too early to make a concrete statement but is an extremely intresting take for sure. Would hope it doesn't go down the harem route. Only question I would have is that is this a translation or an original. (The plot feels like a chinesse fanfic and that's actually praise considering that some of the most intresting world building i have seen comes from that side of the mountains).