Chaos1

9d

Posted

really great story onlything holding you back is the gramer. some points of the story are just unreadable. please get some form of editing

"Well Minister," Harry said as he stood up and swung his foot as hard as possible in-between his victim's legs. "I would like you to meet Peter Pettigrew." Harry said as he hit Pettigrew with a body bind and stomped on his groin. "Now, remember when I said Sirius Black was innocent, remember that? I do. We should probably talk about that now." Harry said as he casually re-stomped the groin.

The Real Harry Potter

Book&Literature · Infinity_Weaver

Chaos1

23d

Commented

+1

1) Let him have knowledge of the DxD verse

Reborn As Hades (DxD)

Anime & Comics · illyisabot

Chaos1

2mth

Posted

dont know what i expected. MC is bascaly all others. only thinking with his lower brain. like all other storys started really good but then it became wifu pokemon again. plot is a slow burn romance is forced and it is becoming very perdictable. so after 100 chaps im am gonna stop this as it is no longer fun to read.

God succession system

Others · Harry_Dresden

Chaos1

3mth

Commented

i get people hating the british musiume and all but most of those relics would not be found if the bridish hadent funded the digs, expeditions and so on.

"Hey, this is the cultural propriety of another race. Do you think I would have the face to do something like that?" I ask in fake outrage "Who do you think I am? The British Museum?"

Meta Essence Gacha in Marvel

Anime & Comics · EvansKannon

Chaos1

3mth

Commented

send a team to earth to mess with megatron and prime

ch 12 LOG-06

Transformers Galvatron Self Insert (TFP)

TV · Devastator_21

Chaos1

3mth

Commented

well another good story gone.

ch 81 Another time skip

Hades in the Multiverse

Anime & Comics · Cedric_7512

Chaos1

4mth

Posted

started great with good chapters and then the haem happend. story has huge potental but the bigest prob i have is that the MC spends toooo much time in his head thinking about usless stuff and he will stick it in anything that is female. hes starting to collect partners like pokemon.

Multiversal: The Shop

Anime & Comics · Charlottes

Chaos1

6mth

Posted

gotta say the story is pretty good but the best part about this novel are the chapter titles. they sound like legitimate news articls.

Florida Man's General Store in Cultivation World

Fantasy · DamnPlotArmor

Chaos1

8mth

Commented

Tsunade, who felt Hiroto's touch, opened her eyes and saw Hiroto smiling at him. Seeing him, her eyes widened and she hugged him and shouted, "Hiro, you are back."

In Naruto World with Perfect Control

Anime & Comics · Logical_Dot

Chaos1

9mth

Posted

started great. now its bascaly another harem. the MC is bascaly extorting sex for info and benifits. the mc bascaly ignores personal strength and takes everything in strides. would like to see what people do with the info he provides for the worlds. personaly Harems ruin the story in my opinion.

Final Fantasy Frontier

Video Games · GloriousRightFoot

Chaos1

9mth

Commented

gunblade

Spotting a predominately blue-feathered, bird-like fiend, known as a Trick Sparrow, pecking at the window of someone's house, Andrew surprised it by dropping down on it from above, slicing it in half with his Mithril Saber. He still made use of daggers, but after experimenting with many different weapon types, the two weapons Andrew felt most comfortable with were sabers and, though he had yet to bring it out in the world of Final Fantasy 9, long-barreled pistols.

Final Fantasy Frontier

Video Games · GloriousRightFoot

Chaos1

11mth

Posted

really pay wall. this is a ff you are using content from others this should not have locked and privlage chapters. you are already using pat erion.

GAME DEVELOPER SYSTEM

Games · NunuXD

Chaos1

11mth

Commented

u back buddy?

This book has been deleted.

Chaos1

11mth

Commented

well well now this is turning great. always liked vandal on of my favs hes nither good or bad .

ch 15 Chapter 14

Young Justice : Mercenary

Anime & Comics · N_Nelson

Chaos1

1yr

Commented

make him move the uzumaki clan to his dimention. that would be funny and a big fyou to the naruto world

ch 105 105 - Another World

MARVEL: GAME MAKER SYSTEM

Movies · NunuXD

Chaos1

1yr

Commented

the force marrage and merger is kind of stupid. cant he just get married then the contract will be filled then annule the marrage? the co tract only states be had.to marry and nutting more after. the same can be said with being the head of the zambi famaily.

ch 71 71) Hmm

Transmigrated into Severus Snape with Golden Trio back in Time

Book&Literature · Jerry153

Chaos1

1yr

Commented

couldnt the goblins help in something like this.

ch 71 71) Hmm

Transmigrated into Severus Snape with Golden Trio back in Time

Book&Literature · Jerry153

Chaos1

1yr

Commented

finaly an MC actualy willing to do what needs to be done

He accepted the quest immediately. Daichi's fists clenched and his teeth grinded in anger as he thought about what happened to his friends. 'Just you wait, Obito. I'll be coming for you one day. And unlike Naruto, mercy or the talk no jutsu would be the last things you will see from me.'