Supermike316 - Profile

I can't really complain about the story, for the first 50 or so chapters it reeks of Tales of Demons and God's, but that's fine because it's good. If your gonna borrow heavily from something it should at least be something good. My biggest problem with this story, is what the author starts to pass off as a "chapter" further in. A chapter should have a reason to start and a reason to end. A chapter here is just an agreed upon number of words. Conversations break off randomly then pick right back up when the next chapter starts. I don't mean like there's a cliffhanger, just regular dialog. I'm guessing the author is trying to hit word counts to make some type of goal for webnovel. It's fine to make money, but don't screw the people who are already overpaying on this site. 2 random paragraphs does not a chapter make. It says there are 439 chapters, in any legit novel it would be around 150. The story has promise though! Keep improving!

Is the author having trouble deciding if his best friend is named Elias or Elijah? Seriously, it changes every sentence. Or, maybe in this novel's crazy world, where teenage girls discuss hymenplastys with their fathers, Elias is a nickname for Elijah....? Seriously author I want to defend you, but you escaped from an asylum somewhere didn't you? Eh, I don't care. This novel is bat-shit insane and I love it.

I like the novel, but so far it's like a darker, R18 version of Everyone Else is a Returnee. Like guardian succubus instead of Angel, two women with powerful families (at least in the former world), Soul Record instead of Akashic Record, blacksmithing...there's plenty more, but I want to avoid spoilers. Granted this story is a lot darker and lacks the comedy element of EER. Not necessarily bad, since I enjoyed that novel, but any closer and the author may need to give writing credit to Toika. At one point this author rips off the copywrite discussion the protagonist of EER has with Lita. Anybody else noticing this? Even the first 2nd order enemy each Protagonist kills is the same. The more I think about it the more I find, and I'm only like 100 or so chapters in!