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just poorly written and poorly translated. and that's really frustrating because I like the premise. The premise is, what if you woke up today in a porn book? all of a sudden you realize, that you're some side character about the die chapter 1 in this book. literally. the main character who is female, sleeps with every guy she can get a hold of, and just happens to survive a catastrophe. what would you do knowing that half the reason, that the world is going to s*** is because she slept around with too many men and it caused an issue. so he tries not to die while also preventing what she does from destroying the world. interesting promise. however, whether it be through how the author writes it or the translator translates it, it is almost impossible quite often to figure out what's going on in the story. entire paragraphs don't make sense. there are moments where the grammar ships between this person's now and he instead of a sheen, and certain ideas that they're trying to convey either don't make sense or aren't conveyed properly. there are multiple times where I was lost trying to figure out what was going on. and it took me multiple paragraphs to kind of peace together that this was the grand plot. and that this was the main thing he was trying to do to stop it. then there's character development. a lot of these characters are blips. basically. they have no personality, really of their own. they show up for all of 5 seconds, and then they're gone for like 5 10 chapters. if this person fell in love with the MC and you rescued her from a bad end, she should show up more than just 10 10 chapters out of 100. same thing with all the other characters that are in this. it doesn't really feel like they're characters. it feels like their footnotes. and then there's the fighting. it's like he skips over the entire actual fight and just gets to the end of it a lot of times. so like we get to this point, and he's about to fight some dude, and he goes I summon a large thunder cloud. and now he's dead. and everybody's in shock and awe at what happened. so impressed. and we the reader are just like what happened? did he fail to dodge? did he put up a defense? nothing is explained, it's just he's dead. so it's like a lot of it is just kind of gone after that and it's kind of frustrating. I almost kind of want to rewrite this myself. with it making sense, with it more fleshed out with better characters, and with a little more thought about certain points that weren't quite fleshed out, that should have been. there's just so much of this that could have been good. that isn't. I don't recommend reading it.

because the book is trash. That's why it should be rated so low. I finished the entire things start to finish. aside from the grammar mistakes that are terrible, especially later on. aside from the fact that the parents are apparently okay with brother sister love. It has one of the worst ending ever. The main character Just waves his hands and kills everybody, fixes everything and then there's no list of the consequences to his action or what happened after. the book just ends. I hated his his character and his sister the most out of everybody. The sister does not deserve to be in the harem of girls he makes at all. and then there's the fact that even those supposedly he keeps eating all of this fruit that makes him smart, he is still stupid. they literally talk about how this is supposed to increase your intelligence. think faster, notice stuff better, the list goes on and yet he's still a retard. he does not change or grow as a character. he just gets stronger. I can go on and on about the problems with this one. from underutilized abilities, to characters having abilities and never using them, I just felt it was a waste. Don't bother reading it, it's a disappointment

beginning to middle is perfectly fine. I loved it. then the translation quality turned crappy. there are multiple times where I can't figure out who is talking. then grammar and punctuation mistakes are heavy. they cleaned it up towards the very end. but by that point it was like the author just wanted to be done with the book. they literally ended the book in a single chapter. there's a lot that's just explained by I killed all the bad guys, waved my hand and fixed all the problems. there's no resolution for one of the consequences of what he did, as well as what happens after he kills everybody. the entire thing just ends right there. very disappointing.

"yeah you're correct. I'm sorry. I will make sure that doesn't happen anymore." it looks like you're getting better but you do still need to work on it a little bit more. Good luck!

the grammar is god awful. like this person barely knows English at all. MC does not adapt to the new world very well and does not pick up on the small things you wouldn't notice immediately. I do not recommend it.

I get the feeling that English is not this person's first language. combine that with the fact that they don't really edit and you get really weird sentence structure that doesn't make sense. or that just flows terribly together. you can probably understand about 60 to 70% of it. but when it happens it's really jarring. really turns you off to keep reading. I shouldn't need to decode my books to read them.